Because I Can Be

...fighting the old demons, ha, everything is possible and anything is conquerable...even if that's not a word, it is now ;)

Lost for words and direction

To a point where I have to make a selection

And not even onto a path of right or wrong

But seemingly steaming full blast ahead,

Falling to the ground with no sense of dread

 

Kicking and scheming for better times to come

This is just a moment for some

A revolution of the self-aware heightened by a sense of panic,

A journey into testing alley with a heart that’s not so thick

A wave of confusion rough enough to make you sick

 

Just for a second we settle into a gentle flow

A light appears, prick up your ears to what you know

Look all around and take it in, this is a chance of calm.

Dipped biscuit damp in a nearly empty container

In which I nearly sank but held on for a retainer

 

You owe me this from all the crap

That went before and because of that

I shall keep on and shall not stay withdrawn

Now I have an opportunity to believe in me

So, from now, this must be the only thing that I can see

 

Author's Note

Needs cutting up as little I feel, bit drab in places?

Reviews

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You owe me this from all the crap
That went before and because of that
I shall keep on and shall not stay withdrawn
Now I have an opportunity to believe in me
So, from now, this must be the only thing that I can see

Just love your closing stanza, this is a wonderful write and you show wonderful talent, like your style so far.

[Barbara Walker]

The last stanza is my favorite!

[Just Manoosh]

Your descriptive word is impressive, also the 5 sentance stanza is hard to pull off (without breaking the flow) but you definately pulled this off.

This does read like it was written straight from your thoughts to paper, I like that.

Mx

[Poetique]

I can really relate to this right about now...life and all it's obstacles....nice job/wording

[None]

You have a good style. Maybe redo this in 4 sentence rhyming formation instead of 5 and add one more verse. It could be all you need. It's emotional and raw.

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Feels like a bit of logical and sensical words towards a parent that is less than understanding. Or maybe a society as a whole. Thoughtful and great cadence. Thank you for sharing your talent.
Light,
Siddartha

[The Spaniard]

Interesting scheme you had working. I liked it. It gave me a feel of angst in a rush to be heard. well done

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Great cadence to this work. The words expressed are powerful and I see the narrator pulling himself up by his bootstraps so to speak. Well done. Quite a pleasure to read. Uplifting in the end as he seems to be getting ahold of a loose situation. Thank you for sharing your talent.
Light,
Siddartha