Frost's kiss

Frost's kiss

A Story by Aldora Sparrow
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For a contest (that is long past). Leave it up to you to interpret however you like

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Frost’s kiss

 

As I lay there, Frost came for me, just as he promised. And he laid his chilling lips upon mine, forever claiming me as his companion in an inescapably numb world.

 

© 2011 Aldora Sparrow


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This is intensely chilling! I liked the imagery of the frost's kiss (chilling lips) I could feel the ice coldness of the connection like I was there. Well done!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Ohhh, chilling. It's short, but I think if it was to much longer then it would just get over-the-top. I really like the way you started the second sentence with 'And'. For me it emphasises it, makes it louder.

Posted 8 Years Ago



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I have been writing for longer than I can remember, but it was only during 7th grade did I start to write outside of class. I am still inexperienced and I love helpful comments. I love to write fa.. more..

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