Tears

your pen created the world in which i dwell

i simply wish your scribbles hadn't created such a fiery hell 

The forest are burning down to nothing

answer me this

why create this something

The boys and girls

all cry tears that sting

never allowed to approach the swing

your brush strokes created for fun

Mothers and fathers refusing

to care for their young

placing them on door steps

under the rising sun

Celebrating lives that never were began

the little fragile hands

holding to mommies

whose are covered in minuscule holes

Do u see this world 

and the torture within

the fights that occur 

between the closest of friends

Destroy this canvas and begin again 

replenish theses souls

make strong the weak

for i am tired of the tears that stain the world

Reviews

[Perfect Mistake]

Oh goodness, i love how you worded this entire poem. Creative and gets the point through. Good work :)

[Rogue]

This is a very well thought out and emotional piece. I like the way you slowly layer, picking up momentum as you go.

[RachelReaper]

The amount of fire in this was stunning, its like when you read it, especially the last two stanzas, it felt like you were being burned the way your words blazed true.

[Persona]

Very meaningful - well done! Great use of imagery, just correct the spelling and you're on to a winner!

[Leslie Philibert]

A good poem that would be even better with you instead of u, but as a part time teacher I have to say that! Good work.

[Sid]

Nice work, you conveyed the ills of this world very well. So much turmoil in our world and much of it self inflicted, it'd be great if this canvas is indeed redrawn, very differently from what it is now...great write!

[Zizzy Douglas]

hahahaha,wow! Evrytin lyf entails,ranging 4rm tears 2 pains,evil&good...Our world's lyk a circle, so full of circumstances mixd wif confusion tangling wif a narow roaded option sumtyms,yet in mist of ..............choices!
U've writin as it were in ya hrt, lyk a true crusader.....nd i totaly agre wif u...pen on bro!

[Felicity's Eve]

I entirely agree with the last line. I mean, what is this world coming to...? -.-"

I think that you have portrayed our downfall very well through this incredible piece of work :)