She is

She's the path I've never known,

one I'll always walk alone.

She's the apple of my eye;

she's the blue in all the sky.

She's the flower that never dies.

She's the fighter who never cries.

She's my emotions never shown;

She's the skill I'll never hone.

She's a queen without a throne,

a constant walk in the unknown.

She's all of life's greatest highs,

a work of art best not revised.

She's the girl I tried to woo;

she's the girl I listened to.

She's the tear I feel inside,

and yet has all my joy supplied.

She's the melody of my song;

her smile makes me sing along.

And no matter how the tune may play,

the sun rises for her everyday.

Reviews

[Bear]

OK I have a question or two: In the first line you contradict your self by saying you have never known but yet you walk her alone which says you do know her. Also (a constant walk in the unknown) in or into the unknown? (she's the girl I listened to) listen present tense or listened past tense?
I like the concept and the form you used, the rhyme scheme is well balanced. It is harder than people think to write a poem that each line starts with the same word and unlike your poem not sound a little silly. The young lady you wrote this for should be well smitten by this, well done my friend :~)

[Not here]

thank you Bear :) and i guess i did contradict myself, and i meant listened as in "i listened to her then, and i still do now." but i dont really wanna change it because i wrote this suddenly and wanted it to be as real as possible, from the heart i guess you could say

[Bear]

I understand how that is, I have some personal poems that film back and forth tense wise and I wouldn't change them for anything or maybe I should say the various people I wrote them for wouldn't let me :~)

[Not here]

lol yeah :)

[Rajat malik]

It's so beautifully crafted, Dante....
Keep it up

[Not here]

thank you for reviewing :) much appreciated

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmi..]

Beautifully written, lyrical with out being too rhymie.

[Not here]

thak you :) im glad you enjoyed it

[Amy R]

this is really a masterpiece, i enjoyed reading it.
great job Dante! :)

[Not here]

thank you amy :) i always appreciate it

[Amy R]

my pleasure Dante :)

[KittyKatgirl]

Omg this is really beautiful. I loved reading through this every line made me want to keep on going. This is really good Dante I enjoyed reading this wonderful poem. Once again you amaze me with your talent :)

[Not here]

lol i havent even sent out the read requests yet! hahaha :) thank you very much though crystal

[KittyKatgirl]

Haha I was looking at my news feed and saw you had a new poem so I decided to read it. And no problem :)

[Not here]

i appreciate it :) this poem is more happy than a few of my recent ones

[KittyKatgirl]

I haven't read much of your poems I'll check them out now :)

[Not here]

some are dark, some are happy. im pretty bipolar

[KittyKatgirl]

I think most writers are like that.