Bathroom Invasion

A gentle fantasy

 

Bathroom Invasion

 

An off-limits room,

Woman’s room

Sink, shower, tile and floor,

Vanity and toilet

What colors?

Achromatic grays, blacks, whites?

Some quinacridone spice

Or scarlet red for fire?

Chrome faucets

With brass or copper trim?

The purest form,

No filagree to squint the eye.

But maybe mirror beveled

To fracture shafts of light

To sparkle cross the little space?

A place for just her use --

Retreat from all

To solitude.

 

The urge to invade so strong.

To creep tween screen

And window frame,

Or snake out neath the door

And leave a simple mark

That says Kilgore

Stood here.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

But how to do it,

Leave a trace,

A dab of pthalo blue

Just above the mirror there

An eyebrow on the wall,

A splash of Aqua Velva too

Or Old Spice just as well

To give the room an alien scent--

And last, not least, a bar

 Of Dial or Irish Spring

Inside the shower stall

To say hi there,

Remember me, and see

What then she’ll do.

 

Of course the best,

And sweetest route

Into this mystery space,

Is to wend your way

Into her thoughts,

By romance and honest love.

She’ll keep you close by

In her dreams

And take you where she goes.

 

David Eckert

1/18/2006

 

 

Reviews

[Benjamin L. Weekly]

Hahaha! This one was a delight, and I was able to understand this quite well. This is the style I like most from you. I love how you get into the mind of a woman with your first verse, with all the styles/colors and meticulous care. As a man, I could care less about the bathroom. I'm barely in there at all.

In the second verse, getting between the window screen and under the door are great ways of saying "I want in there!". I enjoyed those metaphors greatly. I suppose I enjoyed all of this, since the third verse too pleased me with all the descriptions of how you could alert her to your presence.

Ah, romance. Reviewing all the "Romantics" poems is going to make me wistful! Thanks for the read,
- Tiger

[Krystal Waters]

BRAVO!!! This was funny, humerous... I liked the eyebrow.... and you wanting to invade "Her" space. LOL But you got the secret... more power to you! She will be more willing to take you into her space now!

Krystal