A magical experience

this is about something i experienced, that helped me see that i needed to change my ways

Can't sleep tonight; so I'll just sit here and write, 

and hopefully it'll all make sense again.

There's a picture of horseshoes but take away the frame

and it not the same

what was is not now

Throw-up the bad and flush it away

I stand before you a new man on this very day

Life is beautiful don't let it pass you by, I sat there and listened as the moth it cried,

he told me his story with the sounds he made, I tried to make it better but it was fate.

I know not who I am, but I know what I am not

Thank you for helping me see

my mind was closed but now it's open 

and i can yet again breathe

It started and ended in red

-M.D.C

Author's Note

Please tell me what you think and how i can make it better

Reviews

[Branches]

What I have found through poetry is that there will always be many interpretations to what we write. In analyzing your poem I found the meaning a bit vague.

The horseshoe referance makes me think that at one time you were lucky but times changed. You fell on hard times but you've improved now not through lack of trying but through time, contemplation and providence or outside influences. It may have started in blood but ended with your heart.

Sorry for such a drawn out analysis, I don't normally do that. As for improvement, I would let others review first and see what they think. Please keep writing though. I'm still learning myself. Good job.

[Dead-Mike-Man]

The reason it may not make too much sense is because i got the motivation from my shroom trip all this is pretty much what took place and how i felt and what i thought during my trip... I used to be bad with drugs but after doing shrooms i saw how messed up my life was and they helped me see that so that i can change

[Lovely Lady]

Well, it's more important that it is good to you... I love it! a link between "I stand before... and Life is beautiful"... might need to be added to give clarity... and "I tried to make it better but it was fate? might need to be expounded upon...

But to me the spontaneity of the original flow of thought is best.... I think you are a strong writer and it is all in the practice... just keep writing, about your life, you feelings, experiences, journals.... anything!

~♥~