I Will Bleed

I will bleed for those I love

taking a bullet or knife.

I will not bleed for just myself.

 

I will bleed for the poor

to enrich their lives.

I will not bleed to make you rich.

 

I will bleed for honor

if it is in question.

I will not bleed for foolish pride.

 

I will bleed for humanity

when it cries out.

I will not bleed to prove I’m human.

 

I will bleed for you

even if in return

your blood runs cold for me.

Reviews

[emmajoy]

This is virtually an oath of allegiance, it displays unselfishness and loyalty in a very powerful yet straightforward way. Then, the reader reaches those final three lines and knows that what came before is leading up to the deep feelings of: 'I will bleed for you / even if in return / your blood runs cold for me'

It's a mix of sadness and strength. Thank you for sharing this post.

[Rudy Theophin]

i love this poem, it sound like my writing, great job.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

Dale, this is a strong poem .. your writing seems stronger lately.. i agree with a review i got ... seems people here are becoming better and getting a sense of their own style .. not that you didn't and were not .. i feel the same as you .. well expressed and wonderful sentiments.

Chloe
xoxo

[Blackbirdsong]

My this is a mighty write. It almost feels like an anthem for all the strength you bring to it. This is really quite good, Dale...good enough to be published actually. Off to put this one on my favorite's list. :)

I love how you so eloquently speak of courage for friends, the poor; placing yourself as a mighty protector and warrior for them.

Bravo!

[Lorraine Pearson]

You write from a position of great confidence and stamina. I am glad to know there are protectors like you in this universe...some bleed to simply help them recall they are alive. I like the "care" that is behind this write.
~Lorraiyne

[NCPanthersgurl]

Wow, that's really a powerful piece, simplistic though the wording is.

But I agree, I would do the same.

[Glee]

Sounds cool. But what do you do cowboy, when you're caught in a stand off between losing your blood to save yourself or to save those that you love?

[Nicole (Carpe Diem)]

loved this piece - beautiful and sweet

[Suzanne Ashley]

wow.so amazingly powerful!You just touched my soul.Got me thinking...and i'm sure I'll think all night about it....thanks for sharing!

[Robert Luna]

Once again I think you have been channeling me when you have been writing. LOL

I love this and would love to hear it read aloud. I think the impact of its message would be powerful. Seem you have opened a new door into your words my friend.


Great Job!!!!!!!

[Tania Leigh]

Oooh, I love this.....excellent write. That last stanza is killer.

"I will bleed for you
even if in return
your blood runs cold for me."

Bravo!