He died on the Banks of river colifor

He Died on the Banks of  River Colifor
 
As the world goes to sleep, As the Goddess of night casts her magic,
There lies a soldier, who lays wounded beside the river Colifor,
Under the night sky he gazes at the countless stars,
He feels the long night is coming slowly.
The drops of blood oozes out from his wounds,
Blood flows like drops of red wine coming out of his heroic veins,
The cold wind blows across the field, dry leaves have fallen down from trees;
He thinks of his valorous deeds and his servitude towards his homeland,
He thinks of his lovely wife, his two children running towards him,
A drop of tear rolls out of his eye,
He lies down as the river Colifor slowly flows.
 
In the horizon he sees streaks of light, Dawn is approaching
The Lord is sending his foreseer to the sky,
The Sun sent its streaks across the face of the dying soldier
Some dry leaves fall on his body like flowers,
He holds his last breathe till his moment come,
For the last time he prayed to the Almighty, his lips murmured his last wishes,
And slowly he passes away……..
River Colifor watches on, its water murmured the last wish of the soldier
Let there be peace… Let there be peace……

Reviews

[alesuriko]

I don't do the religion thing but I did enjoy this piece. It could use a little work in structure but otherwise it's a good poem. I liked the change from polytheism, with the goddess, to Christianity (or some version of it), with "The Lord". Very modernist. My interpretation of "The Sun" being capitalized, however, also brings me back to ancient mythology (with Apollo, Greek God of the sun, for instance). So it really mixed the religions for me, which I love. Good natural feel to the poem, wonderful tone and atmosphere that really emphasizes the dying soldier. Well done.

[Christina May Shanaberg]

This is a very nice poem and, I agree, "Let there be peace. . . !"