Rain Tanka

Rain comes from on high
out of a broken spine sky
Black shrouded masses
As the world turned to ashes
When I made an angel cry

Reviews

[Seamstress]

Very nice Ricochet, looks almost life there is a soft heart in there.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you seamstress

[dw817]

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Nicely written, Rico, however, how did you make an angel cry ?

[Marie]

He let it see one of his poems.

[Baby Ricochet]

LMAO!!!!!!!!!!!! Marie I love you.

[Baby Ricochet]

Eh. Long story from a long time ago

[Angi]

Ha! Marie cracks me up!!

[dw817]

Well, yah, Marie, some of his poems just might make an angel cry. I dunno. Some of my stuff may make one cry too for that matter, but perhaps for different reasons ...

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

that angel was you, You see you can move people without shocking them, well done my love x

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Thomas

[Joyce S. Greene]

Absolutely beautiful! I love this tanka - the emotional impact is electrifying.. I write tanka and have a great respect for the genre - you might enjoy "her mohawk rocks!" or "a moonbather" on my page -I would be honored if you read some of my work.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Joyce and I would be happy to read your work

[Joyce S. Greene]

Thank you so much.

[TL Boehm]

you know actually there is something beautiful about this even though it is sad.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you TL

[Eddie Phillips]

I enjoyed this. it liked the ending. It gave it a poetic sendoff.

[Baby Ricochet]

thank you eddie

[KAOlmsted]

*sigh* I hope this isn't inspired by true events :-( It's beautiful, but sad. That second line is gold...xoxo

[Baby Ricochet]

It is but not recent. Thank you Kimmer

[KAOlmsted]

Ahh...okay, Baby. (kimmer went *phew*) xoxo

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This is an awesome Tanka,BR

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you cord.

[Tai Ryens]

You know Baby R is being serious when he writes in tankas and makes angels cry

[Baby Ricochet]

That's for sure. Thank you Tai. It's good to see you again.

[Tai Ryens]

My apologies, schooling has taken its toll on me

[Aristede Craig Jr]

oh my love is all praise God forgive... Me these words make me feel empty and I felt like I made one cry my girlfriend many times and it felt like everything was outside of me like I was alone that is all .... Beautiful poem...

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Aristede