to be my love

I've been searching my whole life
for the lady to call my queen
everytime that I get close
she's nowhere to be seen
everyday I'd treat her special
make her smile any way
for her I'd do anything
to make her happy everyday
I've got an ocean of happiness
you care to take a swim?
you'll never ever drown
you'll feel relaxed in every limb
I'd take care of you forever
so tell me can you adjust
I'll be your knight in shining armor
but honesty's a must
to be my love....

Reviews

[Dani]

Such a sweet, lovely poem. I like the "I've got an ocean of happiness / you care to take a swim? / you'll never ever drown / you'll feel relaxed in every limb" lines. Using the water image has a really great effect.

[just is]

This is a very sweet write, so poetic. Well written

[Charlotte Haran]

I like 'an ocean of happiness you care to take a swim?'. A very good poem that is true to how you're feeling. I love how you personified your emotions. Have you ever just floated in the water and just let yourself drift? That's how your poem made me feel when reading it. Peaceful and relaxed. Good read.