Mine and Yours

The first few unsure feelings that I loved

My Space

Your Space

Side by side, inches away yet it feels too far

I long to reach over and close the gap

My Hand

Your Hand

Separated by a wall of uncertainty,

You shift closer then retract; the sound of

Your Breath

My Breath

Synchronized.  The rise and fall of your chest quickens 

Mine follows, as my heartbeat joins the race

My Touch

Your Touch

Not a question of lust, but one of expression

As I ache to tell you how I feel

My Thoughts 

Your Thoughts

With hope that they're similar, but fear that they're not

So for now I sit in contemplative silence 

As I question the possibility of 

My Space

Your Space

Becoming Our Space. 

Reviews

[M J Moore]

OK, the rhythm, the flow, in the piece is great. Really dug the way it bounced back and forth, ebbed and flowed, in my head. It got me thinking, putting myself into it, but at the same time, I didn't lose focus that there was a voice in it either. The idea is old and universal, and while the words themselves may not be the most "creative", I think you put them together inventively, and that's what makes it creative: the delivery. I think this could even be quite excellent as a spoken word piece. Nice job.

[Nupur]

awesome imagination written perfectly, gr8 blend of words

[Leanne Conway]

Stunning write ...

[Sunni Davis]

Wow...so wonderfully sweet and warm. I love the concept and the format behind this. Nicely written.

[Vinod Kumar U K]

Made for sharing spaces of all......

[Morgan Storms]

I really think this poem is fantastic and amazing. I love it! It was nice to read, easy to read with great word play and stanzas. I think it was perfect, sweet, sincere and true. I enjoyed how you ened the poem as well. Thank you for sharing!

I like the format of this poem; it was, as everyone else says, sweet.

[Alicia Hirshey]

This was so sweet.

[Tasha]

This was warm and sweet I loved it.
♥ Ta'Shandra