You

A girl who witnesses someone going through depression and did nothing about it till it was too late.

They say you are ugly,

They say you are horrendous,

But you are lovely,

And in my eyes you are gorgeous.

I see you walk through the hallway all alone,

You start to wish you stayed at home,

But even there you are not safe,

From the taunts from your father whenever he was in a furious chafe.

I see you sitting under a tree,

Your face is hiding behind your hands,

As you cry with unanswered pleas,

I am the only one who can see the scars under your arm bands.

You say you just want to take the pain away,

You think self harm is the only way,

But really its not okay,

I swear tomorrow will be a brand new day.

You hide in your bedroom,

Behind a locked door,

You feel abandoned,

As you grab the knife from your draw.

I am at your funeral,  not many people came,

Most of them didn't even know your name,

I am the one to blame,

I could've helped but now it's too late and I bow my head in shame.

Reviews

[Deep]

You just wrote amazing, while reading I wish the poem should not end. Every inch I was shifting my eyes it was like a picture of some unknown sorrow sprinted in front of me.
A perfect beginning , awesome middle, and a painful ending.
It was just like a image of myself in the written form, and that is what defines writer and his power of pen and thoughts.
Wonderful write!

[thecavaliar]

Watch out for HansJizzy and don't be taken in by him because he's the worst ever troll. Even got hold of another writers personal mobile number somehow, then called up and made unpleasant comments about the writers family; and he's done other personal stuff to people.

I'm bugging his a*s in the hope he'll go away and leave all the decent folk alone, trouble is though I think he gets off on all the attention. You must have noticed how he hardly gets anyone making comments on his stuff, it's because he's so rude and nasty to people, especially some of the female writers on this site. Take this advice or leave it, either way, at least I've told you.

[KittyKatgirl]

I know who he is. He has left a review on this poem in fact and hence how I knew about what a troll he is, and I don't appreciate him doing the same to others. That's why I comment on the reviews I draw him away from the writer, but sometimes in order to defend myself and others I keep the argument going.

[Not here]

i just argue with him because yeah. he's a bit dumb. alot.

[Littlelady]

This was sweet
Try to use more poetic devices and have a purpose behind your writing
Either way, good luck

[KittyKatgirl]

I had another look at this review lol. ANd by the way this poem does have a purpose lol. My purpose is to aware people that if they see someone that is depressed to try and do something about it, instead of just letting it be thinking they'll be alright but then it's too late.

[Littlelady]

Fair enough

[Hope_Lescase]

Wow... that is powerful. That made me tear up. It's incredible how depression can really infect your mind, and spirit. And how sometimes, you feel as if being the shoulder for the person is not enough.

[Davidgeo]

How many more pity poems about depressed 'misunderstood' suicides are we going to have to sit through? There is this pathetic movement to artificially empower weakness in western society these past 20 or so years. It's everywhere and it's annoying. Eventually, it will be the downfall of originality... weakness itself does not create, self actualization does... artificially inducing that in people who don't really have that in them will dilute every form of quality we know of. Depressed to the point of suicide? Do it then, relieve the suffering... if a person wants to die who the f**k are you to make them feel guilty about it? It's the selfish egotism of the shallow altruistic. Deep down, you people don't care, you just want to be seen "caring". Also, your writing is average maybe below average. Even if you're new to poetry or prose, I can tell your voice is dog s**t. This wasn't the first thing of yours I read.

[Faffy]

isn't that a bit harsh mate?

[Davidgeo]

How is that any of your business? Get the f**k off my review. We're not friends nor do I have interest in becoming so.

[KittyKatgirl]

Ignore him Rashan he is looking for attention, please block him he is a troll and warn others please.

[Davidgeo]

Aww... the salty b***h who's made I didn't accept her friend request or like her s****y writing.... how adorable. Attention? No.... I want to read good writers. There's very few of the here so I will not be glad handing any of the hacks and fakers. (like you two clowns)

[Davidgeo]

And you should block me.... I will never tell you simply what you want to hear or pretend a horrible writer is a good one. Keep to your fantasy world, your ego cannot handle reality. (don't kill yourself, or do... I really don't give a s**t)

[Jadennf13]

Damn your views on my friends writing, Crystal is an amazing author and if you don't like anything of hers then don't read them, dont comment, its morons like you who piss me of to no end, what you get off on bullying others? If so I believe you have no honor or dignity, you sir need to grow up

[Davidgeo]

Oh no!! We don't have the same subjective literary taste????!!! What ever shall we do? Run, tell the KIng and the Queen!!! The Kindgom may be near its end!! Me and some rando teenager don't see eye to eye on poetry? ............. For real, do you know how moronic you sound? Get lost twerp, we're all full up on stupid over here.

[KittyKatgirl]

Thank you Jaden. :) I really appreciate that but please be careful and don't provoke him into attacking your writing. He is an attention seeker.

[KittyKatgirl]

Thank you Jaden. :) I really appreciate that but please be careful and don't provoke him into attacking your writing. He is an attention seeker.

[WriterGirl101]

HAha it's hilarious how everyone is ganging up on this asshat....

[Jadennf13]

I care not of his attacks on me, mess with my friends and I will defend, attack me I don't care, nothing he can do to me will effect me

[Davidgeo]

I know, most bullies think it's a good time to get together and pick on the individual... everything you guys are doing right now proves every word I say about you and your generation. Sad. And I love it, it's like I was made to f**k with you people.

[Davidgeo]

You guys done picking on me yet? Get some more friends together.... just say " lets go after the guy who doesn't talk like us" classic.... you guys are living breathing stereotypes. Hilarious.

[Jadennf13]

Ah that's funny, defending a friend, sticking up for them is sad?? Ha I laugh at your twisted views, I'm in everyway defending someone close to me from YOUR attacks, if anything you are the sad one, picking on a girls writing, grow a pair and learn to shut up when you dislike something and vent it off later, good day

[Davidgeo]

PC police!! I think I here the PC police coming to get me!!!

[Davidgeo]

None of this is your business... you have so little confidence in your friend you don't think she can intelligently defend herself? I think she can just fine. You kind of a s****y friend... at least I have respect for this persons faculties.

[Davidgeo]

And Kittykatgirl,, you are welcome for all the attention I've brought you. It could be useful for you should you have the mind to take advantage of it.

[Jadennf13]

Ha your hilarious I'm actually getting a kick off of your stupidity, I know I'm not needed to defend her but what friend will just sit by and do nothing unless asked to, mess with her you make it my business, and to tell you it's hear not here, learn proper word usage, especially if you feel inclined to bash on someone's poem

[Davidgeo]

um, most people who consider one another equal let each other handle their own business. You still live in your parents basement don't you? Or, are you just some 16 year old girl still working off that clique pop high school crowd BS? You kind of suck either way. Well done loser.

[Jadennf13]

So you think just because I help my friend that I live in a basement or just got out if highschool, the fact you think this proves you must be exactly like this, no to satisfy your need I will tell you I'm in the navy and honestly speaking I defend my friends no matter what, the fact that you try to put some twisted manifestation to this is sad

[Davidgeo]

No, the way you go about everything is why I think that. How you talk, how you made a fake profile, how you're just reactionary barking and not a lot of substance.... I mean, the list is long and I'm kinda tired today. Just pick one and go think about it underwater for a few days.

[Jadennf13]

So full of yourself I see, no this was made to help friends, to give them help where they need it, not for you, and if you don't like the way I am, then live with it or leave, now again I say Good day sir

[Davidgeo]

Hush now dear.... your idiot is showing. You should probably stop talking now... but you won't, your kind never really does. Make it interesting and I'll respond, if not, See ya later sweet nips. And again Kittkat, you are very welcome for the attention I have brought to your work. No need to thank me any further, it's always my pleasure to help.

[Inject Positivity]

Very well done Crystal....A very true write and im sure many people will find this inspiring and hope for a new day....Full of message my frnd.....100 ratings.....

[Scrap]

I read am article lately about a man who lived near a bridge who took daily walks there....witnessing many jumpers of many who he saved by inviting them for a cup of tea with his family.

Sad. True. Sometimes people break.

[Angela Sparks]

This is so sad, but so very true. Many people try and put the blame on themselves "maybe if I did that" or 'maybe if I did this" you know about the scars, but you don't say a thing, you know about their problems, but you leave it alone. Small things that maybe you could've said something about but didn't, so not it's your fault. It's a sad way of feeling and it's vividly expressed in this poem. I thoroughly enjoyed this:) that you for sharing

[Shelbie]

This is fantastic. If your goal was to evoke such deep emotions from a reader, you have succeeded! You are very talented! I cannot wait to read more!

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Very interesting topic to write about.
depression is really hard and this person obviously had an extremely severe case of it.
Its also really hard on the people that love you to watch you go through it.
As you state in this story. I
Shocking ending guilt ate her up that bad she killed herself to.
Really moving, deep, emotional write, i enjoyed reading it.

[Ella]

Very sad poem that tells an almost depressing story. Very well written great job!