Presto

Just a quick write inspired by a song.

I don’t have a magic wand

but if I did, I’d make

everything alright

for you and me

 

I ran off

in the middle

of the night

to that perfect

winter garden

 

things didn’t

work out

as planned and I  

got in way too deep

and in the end

I just couldn’t swim

 

 

 

Author's Note

Reviews

[Kenneth The Poet]

Great work as always, brother.

[The Analog Kid]

Thanks Ken!

[Gomer LePoet]

Your deeds are your magic wand Kid. Let them splash with wisdom and kindness, and a preserver will be made available to you. Plans are just another melody waiting to be sent thru the turnaround back to the main theme.

[EMMIE]

Ha ha, this is awesome it flows so well. This could make a cool song. Great write!

[africa]

Cool flow. Drags in the reader

[SkinlessFrank]

a strong metaphor for the many stupidities that we all are find ourselves in, and sometimes learn from, but usually not

[Emily B]

I've been wanting to run off in the middle of the night, just haven't ever got around to it

[Ladysue]

yes Presto...I like that...if only we could have that magic moment and make it alright...A very very good piece of writing...

[just rose.]

two things that I love about this: 1. the rhyme of alright and night ties the first two stanzas together, because they are very natural rhymes and it sounds like a voice speaking; 2. the winter garden vs. the swimming; a metaphor of frozen into thawing, which is profound, but also winter gardens can be hothouses meant for tropical plants, indoors; and so the ambiguity of that phrase shows both a transient quality, of something that can't last without constant tending; and also a thawing out of the narrator's motivation, whether the frozen item is his heart, his intentions, or his passion. well done.

[An owl on the moon]

There is that feeling of wanting to escape here, and the title immediately puts one in the mood for magic.. that desire to be able to set things right, if only we could. Such a deep rich flow, my brother.