The Stranger I knew

About the stranger- who's me!

Your name does still exist

In the map of that permanent pain
Your aim does still persist
In the war of the desert and the rain

Your departure from here last year
Aborted the child and killed the elderly
Your strange nature of hell of fear
It scared the shadow of the trees awfully.

Your secret that lies beneath the coffee trees
Would never be revealed to the lady in red
Your breath that had been smothered and tired
It will remain stood even you fell on your knees

Author's Note

Criticize it as you like!

Reviews

[Elmehdi Adlany]

You can say that this poem is kind of introspective, it reveals the mess that lived, love, the confusion and the insistence on going on.

[Ophielia Nyx]

i like the welcoming of criticism though im not here to give it
honestly some of it i didnt understand i might be a bit simple though :)
I liked the rhyming and the imagery
and it wasnt overly long i liked that too