All Pork and No Way

A short blurb that I spat onto the page. I'm constantly mixing up the first letters of words when I speak quickly, so I wanted to do it on purpose and maybe make it a bit witty for once. Unfinished.

A bull dog, stuck in a dull bog,

is preceded by his sullied name.

He's been bullied--same

as anyone with a preconceived mean streak,

after they've been seen meek.

Reviews

[Joshua Colky]

I like the word play on this poem - the rhyme scheme is nicely done, bull dog/dull bog, sullied/bullied - it is both subtle and works. While you can tell the poem has conformed to the pattern, it does not take away but rather enhances the meaning. I enjoyed it.

[rabbit]

thanks :)

[emipoemi]

Funny.....I laughed......I couldn't contain my laughter. Well done! Simply well done!

[Robin]

that was fun , very interesting title

[Ufi Auttorri ~ UfoAutho..]

Some how I missed this one... and thanks to invs I now see the spoonerism that works so well. You are so very correct. Bullying is often a sad form of family inheritance if not learned in some other sadistic manner. It also, perhaps indirectly, speaks to the timid that have become that which they hated and feared the most. Some, eventually overcome this but it is always there under the surface; the invisible scar. Very well put and memorable. It should be required reading in all schools.

[Wolfwind]

This is the best kind of poetry! playing with rhymes and words is a great way to come up with beautiful nonsensical pieces that make sense! I like it!

Aaron

[Ian H Morrison]

wow i really enjoyed this it is so well written and comes over really strongly

[rabbit]

thank you!

[Ian H Morrison]

you are welcome

[bob, small b. aka invs]

i've always been a fan of spoonerisms (that confusion of consonants that you describe). you used them quite nicely in this well crafted little piece. quite different and nicely done.

[rabbit]

thank you! I didn't know there was a name for that! :)

[bob, small b. aka invs]

you might enjoy this telling of the cinderalla story, done in spoonerisms.......
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=nJv_YXIXBsE

[rabbit]

that was perfect! ahahah i love it!