Knotted Hair

A poem I wrote when I was overwhelmed by life

Knotted hair Not a lack of care With so much to do No time to spare Knotted hair A sign of neglect When I look in the mirror I feel upset Neglected hair It's troubles ignored Its inner storms unheard never reaching the shore If my hair could show you what I feel inside Would you want to see Or should I just hide Overwhelmed hair As responsibilities and anxiety drown me The beauty I once saw no longer surrounds me Tangled hair When one bad thing has not yet ended, Another begins Leaving my emotions Tangled from within Stubborn hair Why are others' so much easier to deal with Why is theirs so naturally smooth Detangled with a single brush Cleaned with no care of what shampoo Why is it so much harder for me When it's something I never got to chose Beautiful hair Please do not compare When I'm trying my best My pain you do not share Cutting hair Don't let them hurt you anymore Your new beautiful hair will grow And I promise you'll soar Damaged hair Many things hurt it But I have to be the one to fix it Broken hair I hope I can heal and repair

Reviews

[_rabbitofhabit (1word)]

I like it but if I had to criticize, I'd say it's a little simplistic and that it somewhat relies too heavily on slant rhymes--I think that's what they're called.