Until We Die?

Until We Die?

A Poem by Liz-z

Don't you wish we were together forever?
Hand in mine
My head resting on your lap
You're hands stroking my brown hair
Me wishing you'll never have to go
You promise never to hurt me
But every second you're gone just happens to break me.

Don't you wish you could stay?
For a life time

Just with me

Holding me close
Knowing I'd drive on to the end with you
Meeting your eyes
Beautiful eyes

One more night

We'll watch the stars fall again
They fall and bring me to tears
You tell me not to fear

You tell me not to burst in tears

But I can't hold it back
You've got to go

That I know


One more touch
One more hug
Until you tell me to sleep
Rest in peace

You're finger on my lip
You give me a kiss
I listen to what you have to say

Dazing into an abyss.


"Goodbye for now
If you can hear me
Please walk without me
Until we all burn in hell
We'll share forever together"
Another kiss on the check
And he heads out the door.

This isn't goodbye forever...

© 2010 Liz-z


Author's Note

Liz-z
It sort of just came, randomly... Hm.

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This poem is AMAZING! I could feel every emotion with each line I read! WOW! You really know how to pull a reader in, grasping their attention. This is just WOW! A VERY good WOW! So sad, yet also more romantic then sad..More of a mixture of both I'd say. The third stanza was so touching, my heart ached a bit as I read it.. Keep up the absolutely exquisite work!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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This poem is AMAZING! I could feel every emotion with each line I read! WOW! You really know how to pull a reader in, grasping their attention. This is just WOW! A VERY good WOW! So sad, yet also more romantic then sad..More of a mixture of both I'd say. The third stanza was so touching, my heart ached a bit as I read it.. Keep up the absolutely exquisite work!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The beginning scared me I thought you knew my love life or something haha, very relatable. Gosh seriously wonderful

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Liz, you seem to have a thing for depressing, emotional and beautiful love poems, eh? XD Either way, good job. :3

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

wow! so amazing. fav line:"One more night
We'll watch the stars fall again
They fall and bring me to tears
You tell me not to fear

You tell me not to burst in tears

But I can't hold it back
You've got to go

That I know


One more touch
One more hug
Until you tell me to sleep
Rest in peace

You're finger on my lip
You give me a kiss
I listen to what you have to say

Dazing into an abyss.


"Goodbye for now
If you can hear me
Please walk without me
Until we all burn in hell
We'll share forever together"
Another kiss on the check
And he heads out the door.

This isn't goodbye forever... " i love it! its an amazing piece liz-z!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Liz-z
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I love to write, even though I could use some more practice, constructive criticism perhaps? :) I love music, the end! THE TEN COMMANDMENTS OF GERARD WAY 1.thou shall never let.. more..

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