When I'm With You

There is so to much to say
I want to scream my heart away
I know for sure
I was told before
That we should be together

No need for a bitter fight
Between me and myself
I know for sure
It's no good to give in

It's time for actions
And less talking
Need affection
And less dreaming

I've try to say no
Tried to come up with reasons not to love you
But I know for sure
It will never happened

Cause when I'm with
I can't help but to bubble up with laughter
Cause when I'm with you
There is always a smile hiding
Cause when I'm with you
I'm just myself
I tell the truth

And I was told before
You love me too
That you flirt with me too
Just as much as I do

Reviews

[Love Is Dead]

Beautiful poem. fav line:"I've try to say no
Tried to come up with reasons not to love you
But I know for sure
It will never happened

Cause when I'm with
I can't help but to bubble up with laughter
Cause when I'm with you
There is always a smile hiding
Cause when I'm with you
I'm just myself
I tell the truth

And I was told before
You love me too
That you flirt with me too
Just as much as I do" sorry its almost the whole poem!

[Joshua Donahue]

such emotion! a great write indeed! although, i think "try" in the following line should be "tried": I've try to say no

it just doesn't sound right as it is. but a great poem anyhow!

[V.J.]

loved the part of need affection less dreaming,
bfings up the thought of love "not being a thinking thing"
anyways good poem, and very very sweet

[DamienHino]

"Cause when I'm with you
I'm just myself
I tell the truth" Nothing to hide, and free to just act yourself I love that.

"And I was told before
You love me too
That you flirt with me too
Just as much as I do" Shy crush, means so much more when you guys are a little clueless about the attraction and then you suddenly find out. Great Poem.

[RTB]

oooo flirtatiousness hahaha very good poem it was a good write and a cute ending

[The Morbid The Merrier]

Very nice. The emotions are clearly splayed out and embedded into the poem, but you need work and grammar. But, in the end, it's a great job overall. :3

[Aekmy]

This is very good! I like the writing, but your grammar needs touching up.
Great job.

[.]

"It's time for actions
And less talking
Need affection
And less dreaming"

...nice-nice verse...
...you are very talented
this is magnificent poem!!!

...love this-a great write!!!

james:-)

[KaySea]

very nice. sweet