Forgiven

So, what did you think? Honestly, what did you think?

Angry
Silence
Is all that was there
Before you left
Through the black painted iron doors.

Regretful
 is the only feeling you've left behind.
You left me, here.
Without a goodbye
And me to be

Alone
Until my death
It's to late isn't it?
I wish I could take it all back,
The last few moments I saw you
It doesn't matter, I know that now
But you can't walk back in here
To hold me tight
To tell me you love me or
To even kiss me goodbye
No, you can't.

Instead
You leave, gone forever 
Never to return,
Living up there, in heaven.
Without me ever being

~Forgiven~

Reviews

[Crusaderscross]

Love it. There is a sense of lines crossed, not crossed, wanting to cross, hesitation. This is what happens when we act and then reflect upon our acts. A simple human trait...which can be very frustrating...:)

Your 4 words sum up the whole mixture of forgiveness and regret

Nicely written

[Forever Mine]

This is one of my favorite poems i have read so far. It was entertaining while still be emotional. Nice work : )

[Love Is Dead]

Wow, it was really good! I liked it a lot and really entertaining and emotional! I really loved it!

[Alisa_the_fluff_ball]

Very powerful. I love how the single words guide you through the emotions of the speaker. You surprised me at the ending which is very hard to do, and I applaud you for that.

[Daydreamer54]

Maybe the girl did something that couldn't be forgiven for... It's sad really becuz everyone deserves a 2nd chance. You did a great job expressing the emotions. The poem is kida sad to me...Anyway, great job on this!

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

This was a good poem. I really liked this. I would have punched that guy in the face if he didn't forgive me. Thanks for sharing. :)