Hard Truth

I wrote this this while reflecting on some insecurities i’ve struggled with since i was a child. It’s nothing spectacular but just something i hoped others could relate to!

I'll be honest, I'd give anything to be seen, to be understood
To wake up with the ease of existing
To feel like every step is reaching towards something
I've prayed, I've manifested, I've searched the confines of my
mind
In hopes of an answer, a solution, an end even
Yet I find myself revolving back to the start
Every day fading into each night
Every night flourishing into each morning
With each doubt, And Each worry, stationed alongside them
It should be easy right?
IfI just make myself beyond recognition
Undo myself from the inside out
Refigure the pieces inside
Suppress the truth and allow the fallacy of my ego to shine
Become the poster child of depict
Maybe just maybe the self-imposed veil placed over my being,
will lighten

Author's Note

any feedback would be appreciated. i have zero gauge on weather my writing is good, bad, boring, etc. Also grammar feedback would be extremely helpful! :)

Reviews

[willweb]

Ok, I am not very good at grammar so I will not touch that portion though check your line 12, I think you need to fix the first part of that line. As for the poem, if you are being honest then it is very well written. You have expressed your feelings and your emotions really nice in this piece. It is not too long or short and it does make the reader think. Now, is that what every poem should be, probably not but we all have our own style and I like yours. As for the theme...days can seem mundane, life can feel like it has no purpose and no meaning but if you take the time to really look at what you bring to the table, as they say, you might just find that you matter much more than you think. Take this poem you have posted and my comment, since we are here...someone may read them and it may allow them to see their lives in a much better light and if so...that happened because of you. You see...just look around you...

Oh...welcome to WC. : )

[utheverse]

Haha i’m not much of a grammar person either so i can appreciate that. Thank you for your response! I think my writing is just a reflection of where i’m at in life which is not the most positive place loll. I actually thought about how i’d like to start writing “happier” pieces but most of my inspiration comes from times of sadness. I really appreciate you providing your outlook as well im definitely taking that to heart (in a good way)

[willweb]

There you go...a happy experience. : )

[Tom]

A thoughtfully penned, pensive poem, introspective in outlook with a yearning need to understand and comes to terms with oneself life's journey progresses along, and that's always a positive sign of a willing ambition to express one's emotions, don't all us would-be writers/poets have those very seem feelings and want to put pen to paper??

An excellent, first poetic presentation here on writer's cafe, I hear you as will many others who will read and equate with this noteworthy write! 🌟🌟🌟