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Cloud without water

Cloud without water

A Poem by Edward Lancheister
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philosophy of nature

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Along with the strong wind blows

Dark clouds paint the sky

A glorious moment as it goes

Grass bowed due to strong gusts

As if the earth swallowed up in the darkness

life figure hiding in the shelter

storm coming stronger than before

The natural moment like a symphony

when nature reveals the vanity

waiting for the rain to fall

as the shadow swallow them all

which devour all the existing light

like falling into the deepest night


 The wind slowly turns to fade 

in the sudden all it’s gone

such as inhaled in silence

left only a gentle breeze that move on

sun emits the light back again

cirrus redecorate the sky like a smooth shading

without giving a single rain falling

such as the hidden mysteries of nature


Like a cloud without water



 

 

 

 

 

© 2014 Edward Lancheister


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But in the sudden- it doesn't go with the flow.Like you can change it to " but in a flash." And that is not grammatically correct too.Its just a suggestion though.you've given your philosophy of nature a different turn where dark clouds are swallowed by light and cirrus float,without raining.A very introspective piece.Keep writing amigo :)

~Sophy

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sophy Freebirds

5 Years Ago

I really like your words Edward.thanks for being flexible for my suggestion.. he is talking of cloud.. read more
Edward Lancheister

5 Years Ago

everybody have an opinion according to their point of view. i really glad with all the reviews that .. read more
Sophy Freebirds

5 Years Ago

So kind of you Edward ★takecare★ :)



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love the title and the concept .. lots can be said about it .. you have used dark and darkness several times .. wondering if saying it differently and getting rid of a couple of them would improve your poem ..
"life figure hiding in the shelter" i like that! the figure is an enigma .. might even be an animal .. i find the way you put it intriguing
E.

Posted 5 Years Ago


But in the sudden- it doesn't go with the flow.Like you can change it to " but in a flash." And that is not grammatically correct too.Its just a suggestion though.you've given your philosophy of nature a different turn where dark clouds are swallowed by light and cirrus float,without raining.A very introspective piece.Keep writing amigo :)

~Sophy

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sophy Freebirds

5 Years Ago

I really like your words Edward.thanks for being flexible for my suggestion.. he is talking of cloud.. read more
Edward Lancheister

5 Years Ago

everybody have an opinion according to their point of view. i really glad with all the reviews that .. read more
Sophy Freebirds

5 Years Ago

So kind of you Edward ★takecare★ :)
I like the line about the sun emitting the light back again. It's as if the sun absorbed the light into itself. Nice occasional rhyming.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Edward Lancheister

5 Years Ago

thank you for kind review and for stop by to read my poem. it mean a lot to me

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Added on August 4, 2014
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Edward Lancheister
Edward Lancheister

E.L Celestial, United Kingdom



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simply person that like to write from the things i see according to my notes from travelling and research, try to convey things that capture by eyes, camera or feel by sense. for me poem is more than .. more..

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