My Story

My Story

A Poem by SilentDreamer


You know that feeling you get
After you've been hit in the face
Or punched in the stomach?
(I feel like that every day.)
You know how your head feels
After you've been crying for hours?
(I feel that all too often.)
You know how sometimes you have
That feeling of emptiness you can't explain
And it won't go away?
(I know it all too much.)
You know the feeling that no one
Is there or could possibly understand
Let alone help you?
(You're not alone)
You know that feeling that no one knows
at all, and you're all alone with your secret
That you can never tell?
(...Story of my life.)

© 2011 SilentDreamer


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Owe wow that was deep and it cut me right their in the heart that from the beginning you had me hooked nodding my head on every word. This would be a perfect writing for people to relate to just to know they are not alone. I mean I love the stanza and the whole concept of the whole thing as you asked at question that so many have felt at least once in their life sadly but, yet answered it as if its your own. the feel into this was great and emotions and how you came at the end with "Story of my life." was just awesome. I wish I could give you some real constructive criticism but, I'm sorry to say I loved this way to much. Its going in my library. Well done and thanks for letting me know were not alone.

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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Aaaw. I guess a lot of people can really relate to this. This was really well-written. However, in my opinion, the parentheses are not really needed. It'll still mean and flow the same. And I think the lines inside them are the most important ones since they are the ones that tell your story. That's just what I think though. But still, this one's really good. Keep on writing. :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


Interesting statements ... Don't give up .. Life takes turns we can never imagine ...

J. x

Posted 12 Years Ago


It's beautiful. I love this because it's so relatable. You did a fantastic job!

Posted 12 Years Ago


This poem is well written and thought out. Full of emotion, and very relateable.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Owe wow that was deep and it cut me right their in the heart that from the beginning you had me hooked nodding my head on every word. This would be a perfect writing for people to relate to just to know they are not alone. I mean I love the stanza and the whole concept of the whole thing as you asked at question that so many have felt at least once in their life sadly but, yet answered it as if its your own. the feel into this was great and emotions and how you came at the end with "Story of my life." was just awesome. I wish I could give you some real constructive criticism but, I'm sorry to say I loved this way to much. Its going in my library. Well done and thanks for letting me know were not alone.

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

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RJM
Sadness cuts to the bone. You're not alone, this is not just your story. It's our story, it's the story of each and every human being alive. Beautiful yet sad work.

Posted 12 Years Ago



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☼ Hey! Well I'm a writer, of course. I love hanging out with my friends, writing, reading, shopping, being outside, listening to music, cooking, gardening, photography, acting and playing guit.. more..

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