My Room

My Room

When voices are loud

Provoking words surround

Heart breaking sound

I can’t be found

 

Hearing insult

Receiving verbal assault

Like a bolt

Painful result

 

I can’t find

A place to hide

My downfall and tide

Where to reside?

 

So I think I can stay

When I’m not gay

Night and day

When emotions play

 

Yes, it is just small

It is where I fall

When my heart’s in trouble

Dying soul

 

My room is a blessing

Where I can dance and sing

My hurtful feeling

Dying being

 

Though my room is dark

There’s always a spark

When I feel I’m in a park

Big as Noah’s ark

 

My room is special

And spatial

It is not for rental

It is my personal

 

So I think I can stay

When I’m not gay

Night and day

In my room I can always lay.

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Thanks for reading :)

Reviews

[emman]

Oh I loved the flow of words, and the easy reading here. You did something really good. I like the way it is written, and your beautiful message, where you in the end feel so at peace, safe, and at home. (p.s. Even if you where gay, I would embrace your heart). but I know you're definitely not :D xo

E.L.

[emman]

I'm not a gay..LOL..I'm gay means I'm happy,not gay as a gender :)

Thanks for the review E.L

:D

LOL, don't go in denial, I would think you where HA! :D I know ;) again you're not, I know all what you mean... LOL ha, brilliant guy! :D

[emman]

hahaha :p LOL :)

[Pax]

the rhyming is really nice just like a song. brilliant!

[emman]

Thank you so much!nakasulat ra jud kog balik after pila ka months..and now I'm back :)

[Pax]

welcome back mego, murag dugay dugay nagud.

[emman]

mao jud amego..back to sharpness.. :)

[Pax]

meaning, gi taya na ang grammar..lol..na baid na...

[emman]

kaayo mego..gitaya na..pabaid ko utro..mao rani atong pamaagi para mohait utro..writing :)

[Pax]

hahahaha...lol..mao gud..ako ani..damul pa giyapon..needs a little sharpening.. :D

[emman]

sige lang jud mego kay kadasulat nato mosharpen jud atong mind..writers are always writers

[Pax]

before i dont considered myself as one, as was just the visual artist wanted to explore his creativity and try new things..now..i think heading there..becoming a writer...

[emman]

yes you are mego..once you write beyond your mind's capacity you really deserve to be called one..

[Steven Cash]

It was nice!

Big room tho

[emman]

My room is just small :) but it gets bigger every time I imagine it as big as Noah's Ark :p

[Steven Cash]

ah, gotcha

[emman]

hahaha..yeah :)

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

This was a great write. I feel like a room that you can call your own can be the special place which is a good thing. I loved the rhyming. Thank you for sharing.

[emman]

Thanks for the review...I'm reading Aidan now..every chapter means..excitement.. :) cool!great!nice!

[Angie Diane♥♥]

No problem! I will be reviewing more too. I haven't had time to get on here much cause of work, but they cut my hours so now I will have more time. I may edit a little bit, but thank you for the critique and reviews so far!

[emman]

you're welcome..same as you I haven't had time to read and review, but whenever I have free time..then it is time for me to read and review..I really enjoy reading and reviewing here..my kind of world :)

[Angie Diane♥♥]

Mine too! I used to reviews hundreds of pieces a day! So I still thank you for the reviews. It makes me happy. Aidan is my pride and joy. I'm happy if you are liking it! If you find anything wrong with grammar just let me know!

[emman]

Hmmm..I'm not that really good in criticizing grammar because I'm not an English native speaker..but I'm trying my best to write according to the English standard..what is most important to me is the thought of a poem, chapter, or whatever I am reading :) and talking about Aidan.. 100% great! :)

[Angie Diane♥♥]

Why thank you. And it's good that you are trying. It's always good because you will eventually get better at writing in English. Sometimes English is difficult to understand. If you ever need me to explain anything I will be happy too!

[emman]

Thank you so much :) We Filipinos can really speak in English but when it comes to writing, honestly we find it difficult following the standards (grammar, punctuations, etc.)

[emman]

But the good thing is that we always keep on using it (speaking)

[Angie Diane♥♥]

Yeah, I understand. :)
I hate grammar sometimes, but that makes us better writers. I was reading trash today and that's why I decided to reedit Aidan x.x

[Angie Diane♥♥]

Yup, it is!

[emman]

Thanks for the understanding, I have to go back reading Aidan..honestly it is so nice..I really get excited in every chapter of what is going to happen next..I'm in chapter 3 already :)

[Angie Diane♥♥]

really?

[emman]

yes :)

[emman]

not yet done reading chapter 3

[Angie Diane♥♥]

Lol ohh I see :p I have to review more xd