I called you Coca Cola

I called you Coca Cola
Sweet yet acidic
I took one sip
And I didn’t want to quit it
Bubbly yet dark
A balance of it all
Your affect on me, that caffeine
I’m bouncing off the walls
When life served me a s****y plate
You washed it all away
You gave my life a fresh new taste
That I wanted to stay

Reviews

[emipoemi]

This has a fun vibe to it. I much enjoyed the way you crafted the poem to express the metaphor. Quite whimsical and, I dare say, magical. If you would permit me a little critique: your musicality on two lines (Lines 7 and 12) could use some tweaking so it flows better (both need an extra syllable - 7 because "that caffeine" is too spondaic and needs a word like "strong" or some monosyllable for the line to be complete, whereas in 12, "wanted" is landing on the wrong sylLAble). This is otherwise fantastic! Well done!

[Gaurav]

really loved the title but also your inherent ability to build a creative story around cola. That's what i've noticed. You pull a word out and use your innovative mind to make a piece. Such as love sick. I think that's just awesome.

[E.J. Michalec]

Thank you so so much! I really appreciate the feedback!

[KCthelastboyscout]

Great metaphors describing your emotions.Dr.pepper guy myself
Pleasure to read

[Planet x]

Cute :) I like it
Good one