memories

happiness it lasts not long
soon enough, it will be gone
sorrow and anguish will take its place
leaving feelings that cant be erased

only memories remain
conjuring feelings of pain
pain not only from bad times then
but more so from good times,
that won't happen again.

Reviews

[Falling Leaf.]

You seem to have quite a few pieces written like this. Is this a certain form you follow? I'm not familliar with it, but I like it. The fact that you have no apostrophes in your contractions irks me, but that's fine. The only thing I suggest changing is the last two lines. I would rewrite them as:

"but more so from good times
that wont happen again."

Yes, I would also add a period to the ending line. I think it would make the end more dramatic.

Anyhow, a good piece. Well done.