Life begins again

A portrait poem

 

I think sometimes

tears fall into the great blue sea

then a giant hand wipes them away

like a warm sunrise after a chilly night.

So many times your grace has offered me a shoulder to cry on and I foolishly turned the other way thinking I can defend myself.

So I cry alone.

But those shoes are worn,

and I wish I could start again.

I could be a bird and choose a different flight.

Maybe a fleeting, fluttering, free direction,

But not alone, not this time, a slight correction.

With blue sky ahead and the scent of tearful seas below,

And the horizon acting as a referee to the sea and sky,

I breathe your name

And life begins again.

Reviews

[Priscilla Sayers]

A breathtaking poem.
Into my Favs:)

[Gordon]

This was done as part of a "Portrait Poem" competition. There were specific rules for each line. I enjoyed doing this and am thinking of doing another one.

[Pink Poison]

Very nice. I like the imagery in this poem, it is very strong.

And I wish I could start again.
I could be a bird and choose a different flight.
Maybe a fleeting, fluttering, free direction.
But not alone, not this time, a slight correction.

I think we all wish we could start again, sometimes, and correct the things we did wrong. Your poem is very easy to relate to because it addresses that universal concept. The subtle rhyme is also nice. Great job!

[Gabrielle E. M. T.]

This is a very powerful poem.
Nice flow of words.
Good rythme.
Great form.
Beautiful work.
Wonderfully written.
Great Job.

[BrightEyes]

"I breathe your name
And life begins again"

wow - what powerful two lines - I have to admit that I tend to hide my tears - never did like to cry in front of others or show pain - I have learned though - that there is comfort to be had in the shoulder of a trusted soul. nicely done.