Sacred Fear

So, this is probably the first and only writing I've let anyone read, and the only one I've really ever completely finished. It's not the best, but it's a start.:)

I'm hiding in the darkness,

always afraid of what light may bring.

"Come out! Come out!" They say,

"Nothing has happened to me!

You'll be safe here in my arms,

they'll never take you away from me!"

But I'm too scared. 

I don't want to hurt anymore.

Don't save me against my will,

don't make it burn even more.

Even though I'll always trust you,

I don't need you anymore.

So don't save me against my will,

I don't want to hurt anymore.

Please just leave me here to burn,

until I cannot feel it anymore.

But no no, not ever.

You swear you'll never leave me alone!

Don't you see this is not what I want?

Why can't you just leave me be?

I don't want you here anymore,

just go away from me.

Hunny please just grant me this wish,

and run away from me.

Now your gone...

And I should be happy.

What the hell is wrong with me?

I didn't want you here!

You finally let me be.

So why am I so unhappy?

Why am I so sad?

I told you to go away,

but now I just want you back.

But no no not ever.

You swore you'd never leave me alone!

Don't you see this is not what I want?

Why did you leave me be?

I just want you here now,

why did you leave me?

Baby please just grant me this wish,

and run away with me.

Please come back!

I miss you.

I cannot take this anymore!

I thought I knew what I wanted,

but I'm not so sure anymore.

Just come back to me baby,

I'll be sure to appreciate you more.

Please come back to me..

I can't live without you anymore.

Author's Note

It sucks, I know this.

Reviews

[ObscurityNone]

It does not suck, you simply seem to be redundant, is all. Not too much harm in that.

[Donovan Simpson]

I think this poem is great...It ryhmes and you show how people are when they are lost in a relationship. :)

[i'mjustalonelywriter]

Thankyou! :)

[Poet]

No, it doesn't suck. You write with the mood of someone lost and conflicted, not knowing which way to turn. This is normal at times in or lives. Sometimes we just want to be alone to heal, but healing doesn't always come enough and we reach out to those we tried to distance ourselves from.

I thought you expressed yourself well here. Good writing.

Pendragon (Dark Realm)

[i'mjustalonelywriter]

Thankyew :3

[Poet]

You're welcome.

[Faffy]

like i tell everybody who says their poetry sucks, it doesn't its an expression of emotion captured in words so i can never be bad, you are a brilliant writer and this seriously lacks acknowledgement its a beautiful and well written poem that expresses great pain and sadness, the second stanza is my favorite its so dark but i find an element of innocence in it. i hope you would write a lot more like this because they are amazing to read. keep up the amazing work =)

-roshan

[i'mjustalonelywriter]

Shanks :)