MY BEAUTIFUL MESS!

MY BEAUTIFUL MESS!

A Poem by cimmy wuv xxxooo
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A guy who is in love with a woman who is a mess in many way's.

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Everymorning you rise from your sleep, 
Everymorning theres secrets you keep. 
Everymorning you have a messy head of hair, 
Every morning I'll always be there. 
MY BEAUTIFUL MESS!

Your wall is up, for you've had a tough life,
Your wall is up, but someday ill tear it down.
Your wall is up, oneday i'll make you my wife,
Your wall is up, you always wear a frown,
but someday i'll turn it upside down.
MY BEAUTIFUL MESS!

Never happy with how you look, 
Always wanting someone to hold.
Never easy to read, nor an open book,
Always crying out in the cold. 
MY BEAUTIFUL MESS!

One day when your walls come down, 
I'll drive away the hurt and pain. 
One day when you come around, 
I know i can make you happy again. 
MY BEAUTIFUL MESS!

I'll pull you up and onto your feet, 
Ill hold you close and never let you fall.
Because your best girl i'll ever meet,
You're worth it all.
MY BEAUTIFUL MESS!

Everynight I'll watch you as you sleep,
Everynight for you're the one i'll cherish and keep.
Everynight I'll smile to myself as i lay in our bed,
Everynight I dream of the day we will be Wed!
MY BEAUTIFUL MESS!


© 2014 cimmy wuv xxxooo


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This is truly powerful. One is truly lucky to have someone who will stand by them through thick and thin, accept and love them as they are, and soothingly let them relax a bit more and open up at their own pace. And it is possible if two people want it to happen and work at it together!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

cimmy wuv xxxooo

9 Years Ago

Thank you for the wonderful review :)
jeannemarie coulter

9 Years Ago

you are welcome



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I enjoyed the rhyme and the light feeling it created, even as it moved between light and airy to sad and sombre, back to light and hopeful. The air of determination at the end is my favourite part of this poem. Well written cimmy. Keep it up!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

cimmy wuv xxxooo

10 Years Ago

Thank you for your wonderful review :)
I'm not a big fan of repetition but it works with the flow here, who doesn't love a beautiful mess. Reads as it could be a song to me, like the sentiment here a lot cimmy.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

cimmy wuv xxxooo

10 Years Ago

Thank you Frieda glad you liked it :)
My sister does songs and her voice is really good, she w.. read more
Frieda P

10 Years Ago

I definitely think it would work...and my pleasure :-)
An interesting piece, really illustrates that feeling of trying to be there for someone, and all their imperfections just make them that much more beautiful to you. I like the way that you fluctuated your rhyming scheme, not sticking to a single pattern. A few of the rhymes did feel a bit forced and contrived, but it never got in the way of this excellent piece; although it could probably be improved with a little work on the rhyme.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

cimmy wuv xxxooo

10 Years Ago

Oh thank you so much for your review :) I didnt know the rhymes felt forced, usually I get told that.. read more
Nusquam Esse

10 Years Ago

Understandable... it is difficult to follow structure and rhyme without it feeling forced, or worse,.. read more
cimmy wuv xxxooo

10 Years Ago

Yes as do i poems which rhyme just sound more poetic.
Yes sometimes that can be difficult, rh.. read more
really good piece..really touching and moving...well done:)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

cimmy wuv xxxooo

10 Years Ago

thank you :)
This is very adorable! I love it's loveliness

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

cimmy wuv xxxooo

10 Years Ago

thank you :)
A splendid romantic poem! Simply beautiful! Well done!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

cimmy wuv xxxooo

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much:) glad you enjoyed :)
now THIS is wonderful! Talk about romantic, I love it! "You're worth it all" jumped out at me, to do anything for the one you love...
Awesome poem!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

cimmy wuv xxxooo

10 Years Ago

Awww thank you so much glad you enjoyed it :)
"Never easy to read, not an open book". Marvellous. As all your poems it flows, is romantic. But you have startled me with this role reversal of your. I hope someone sees the beauty in my mess too :-D. And the fact you talk about wedding makes it so pure, so simple. Awsm write :-)

Posted 10 Years Ago


cimmy wuv xxxooo

10 Years Ago

Hehe so glad you liked it Penny :) thank you for your amazing review :)
Penny

10 Years Ago

My pleasure tottttally..
Wow.. Nice writing. Keep writing. If possible then Do u read my writing Anguish?

Posted 10 Years Ago


2 of 3 people found this review constructive.

cimmy wuv xxxooo

10 Years Ago

Yer sure when i get the time no problem :)
Thank you :))
Awwww Cimmy this was so sweet!!!! Ugh I love this way too much! Haha! Great job definitley keep it up! :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

cimmy wuv xxxooo

10 Years Ago

Thank chu Beautiful glad you enjoyed :)
❤ Maggie ❤

10 Years Ago

Aw you are most welcome :)

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Added on February 6, 2014
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cimmy wuv xxxooo
cimmy wuv xxxooo

melbourne, Australia



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Hey everyone im cimmonne (prounced simone) but everyone i know and love calls me cimmy. I'm unique and different and 100 percent me. I have a passion for writing and i want to share my writing with ev.. more..

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