I Taste & I Guess What We Are

Electron becomes my visage, a bewildered fool,

Like an angel, I am without flesh, an ethereal tool,

Both of us drifting weightless, as a feather's grace,

Yet here I am, a human soul, pondering my place.

Sitting in contemplation, questioning my role,

Wondering, "What the hell am I doing?" as thoughts unroll,

Inhaling the air, breathing in, breathing out,

Seeking purpose amidst the chaos, casting doubt.

Wishing spirit, longing for your recognition,

Yearning for you to perceive my hidden disposition,

Even when absent, I'm still all around,

Bound by invisible threads, forever tightly wound.

These threads weave a tapestry, mysterious and tight,

Connecting us in the depths of the darkened night,

My essence dances, free and ephemeral,

Craving the touch of your presence, oh, how I dwell.

Though intangible, a phantom of this earthly plane,

Desiring to be seen, understood, not in vain,

As I ponder the grand scheme of life's design,

Hoping my purpose, dreams, and hopes align.

With every breath, a reminder of my existence,

Whispering through time, defying resistance,

Notice my absence, hear the echoes resound,

Know that I am here, even when not around.

I am the breeze's murmur, gentle and serene,

The sunlight's warmth, filtering through nature's green,

Residing within laughter shared by loved ones dear,

And within tears silently shed, I'm always near.

So fear not, my dear one, for I am forever close,

Whispering in your heart with each beat that arose,

In this mortal guise, lacking tangible might,

Our connection transcends, an eternal light.

Within this vast fabric of existence, we're entwined,

Interwoven, inseparable, our spirits aligned,

So breathe in the world, feel its embrace profound,

For in every moment, my essence can always be found.

:: 07.16.2023 ::

Reviews

[emipoemi]

Where to start! Where to start! This is amazing! In terms of form and execution, you have woven a masterful tapestry for the senses and it moves! It flows! It has the kind of rappy moments that also seep into rivulets of passion. And the story that this tells is solemn and cathartic and really tugs at the heart and soul at the end. My favourite moment has to be "Notice my absence......even when not around" those two lines remind me of that poem "Do not stand at my grave and weep" - the whole poem seems to have that vibe, but in my opinion a tad better expressed - the utter juice!! I would be remiss, though, if I didn't nitpick the only flaw in this diamond of a piece. You're in present the entire poem and the line in question is supposed to imply the future yet you use the past for the sake of rhyming (and it's not even a full rhyme so it's a double whammy) and that's the use of "arose" It needs a new word. The way you have it makes it stick out like a sore thumb and your message in the poem defeats the purpose of having a sore thumb - let alone a flaw. So that's my only proposition for tweaking. other than that - this is brilliant! Well done!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"In this mortal guise, lacking tangible might"
I really like that line so much.
Nicely metered and rhyme is this poem...as it draws attention to how much one can love and be loved.

j.