Clitoria

A haiku about...flowers, of course!

spread her purple bloom

fingers indulge her moisture

pleasure on petals

Author's Note

I'm not sure whether this is technically a haiku or a senryu, but it is about nature, so it could be either, I suppose.

Reviews

[Robbie~xoxo~]

ohhh la la!

It's as if I see only a purple haze...
A sensually intoxicating flower, Eric!.....Nicely done! ~xoxo~:)

(on a small note)...I feel as if the word "liquid" is trite... perhaps "moisture" will soften the flow and add a luscious fragrance to your readers mind. ;)

[Eric Pudalov]

Thanks for your review and constructive critique, Robbie! Now that I've read it through again, I do think "moisture" sounds better. (And you wouldn't believe how many plants and flowers have a vaginal appearance...really!) Glad you appreciated it overall. ;-)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

They do... God knew what he was doing... flowers are divine!..and intoxicating...
You are most welcome... ~xoxo~;)

[Eric Pudalov]

How does it sound with the word "moisture"? I like it now!

[Lydia Shutter]

Hmmm.....about a flower? Tell THAT to someone who will believe you! Seductive to say the least. Lydi*

[Eric Pudalov]

Thank you Lydi! That's what I had in mind. :-)

[Trace]

If they were not attractive, nobody would want to pollinate them.


Trace

[Eric Pudalov]

Good point, Trace! The same goes for humans, right?

[Trace]

EXACTLY !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[Frieda P]

It's an abomination is what it is LOL, very clever posy hon ;-)