I saw that metaphor slip and fall on the ice of her demeanor Jacob and there you sat on your butt getting wet and colder by the second... and salty tears give no aide to the heart, but sometimes do give rise to wonderful poetry, like this one Jacob... do we need to call the ambulance, help you up??!!
redzone
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
ha ha, on the ambulance...you're too funny...thanks for the smile, my friend.
i am very deliberate in my steps on icy slopes these days ... but when cryin' won't do it ... i don't know what can :{ ... maybe better a broken hip that lands me in the hospital where they would give me the "good" stuff ;) just kidding of course. four lines title perfect .. that's a nice little challenge to put together well .. nice one jacob
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Usually we think of tears sweet, as they might be the very expression of the heart. But this... adds a whole new conceptions of tears. Surely the phrase "Drowning in tears" doesn't apply to this cold heart...
sometime silent ice is always treated as cold, fool fellow, it's reason is never scrutinized..a wonderful feelings. the last line is just heart stopping!
Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at a community college and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. I am here to read for inspiration from other po.. more..