Crazy Paring

Crazy Paring

 

 

i'm a flake

not snow

not dandruff

not corn

or bran

 

just a flake

writing as a crazy constituent

not of politics

not of policy

but of love

 

i'm a flake

falling for you

from some bandied sky

a raindrop in your eye

a tear you wipe away

as you strain to see

 

the impaired vision

that is me

the flake

not fake

not a mistake

or a second take

 

i'm a flake

coming at you

to rest on your shoulder

 

to speak fluent love

upon your ear

to warm the cold

within

and without

 

hoping this crazy flake

can melt in your heart

and parlay your doubt.

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

7/11/19

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I love this poem! One of my favorites of yours lately, altho you've been pumping out some gems! Sometimes feeling like a flake, we don't put ourselves "out there" for love . . . that's why I love how your narrator has the conviction to go for it, despite feeling flaky (but not fragile) Fondly, Margie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Margie.
Last part of your review had me singing BTO....
j.

[Patricia]

oh this is really awesome, first I love the wording and second the hope of love. It's charming and being a flake can be fun it just means you still have a bit of kid in you, which we should all have, otherwise life is such a bore being a grown up all of the time. I try not to be. ;)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Pat....i still feel like i have the maturity of a seven year old....so lots of kid still in there...
Don't dare call ME a grownup...:)))))

[Patricia]

LOL I wouldn't dream of it!

[Fran Marie]

A lighthearted piece..perhaps a tad flakey..but sometimes being flakey can be fun no doubt
nice work..

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ha ha, thanks Fran...Flaky i definitely am..

[Fran Marie]

Aren't we all;.
you're welcome

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Superbe word play as you toy with the concept of being 'flakey in-love' and let the words drip off the page in a flow of 'associated' words and phrases!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, John,
j.

[Tinabells]

This is kinda fun to read. Great penned!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Tina...
j.

[andrew mitchell]

This reminded me of 10cc The things we do for love! This was fun, sad and so true.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

appreciate your words, andrew,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Paring away. Getting to the heart of the matter. Revealing who you are. Peeling away the onion layers. It's all about love and you hope others notice that is what you stand for. Love, not conflict. I thought of cornflakes when I read this first time: Must be hungry for breakfast.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ha ha..thanks, Chris.
j.