Nearer as Farther States

Nearer as Farther States

 

 

kiss, of course

melting knees

 

perfumed flannel

lips pose next to mine

 

we button up the passion of us

crisscross patterns of love

 

held tightly as one body of proof

a constellation, 

 

a sky for us to meld

stars burning out together

 

the aftermath

still visible 

 

in eternal light

eternal breath

 

two candles still flickering

in delayed mourning.

 

erin-cilberto

12/28/2020

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I love every single line, each presenting yet another thought-provoking way to visualize what you're throwing down. Your poem reminds me of how two people might cling together despite imperfections becuz any lasting port in this storm is exactly what's treasured these days (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your understanding words, Margie.
j.

[.]

Seems like this pattern of love was worn out over time, yet even still as those candles mourn the end, the flame still flickers for what once was. This reminded me of my Grandmother's old knitting escapades and the somewhat ill fitting (and sometimes horrendous) patterns she would come up with....but all put together with love, and so it is with some relationships. Some patterns just do not go well together. An excellent metaphor for love, relations and their endings, J! :)))

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yes, love might be stitched erratically but it is still an attempt to find a pattern that words...Your Grandmother's knitting was surely beautiful to you...
My mom always made me quilts....I still have a couple to remember her by.
thank you, Jamila,
j.

[Pete]

relationships are complex but in or out they always leave their mark upon us and have us pondering. like an enigma wrapped in a conundrum. your words echo this reality. do we pull them closer or push them away. shakespeare said to be or not to be. perhaps your cogent ending holds a clue to letting go whilst still basking in the afterglow - easier said than done of course as you so soberingly remind ... :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Pete,
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Patterns of love are not repeated and often not meant to be. Those candles still flicker in our hearts...just a tad. We mourn the end of a relationship even when we know we are better off leaving. One of the many conundrums of life is why we end up in bad relationships. Must be chemistry....I always hated that subject! :) I liked this one, Jacob. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I sucked at chemistry...and pretty much at relationships as well...I need a different course schedule.
thank you for your words, Lydi,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Some things aren't built to last, yet they burn brightly for a short time. I saw two comets here Jacob. A spectacular show before they fizzled out.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

oh if only we could hang on to that passion a bit longer.
thank you, Chris.
j.

[poetgurl (Plainly Meg)]

love that third stanza, i got some emotions through out this write.
nicely expressed

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you Ang...I am happy you could feel something through these words.
j.

[andrew mitchell]

I couldn’t quite help feeling that both parties knew this love would not last was the impression I got.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, andrew...
something's burning.
j.