the mad matter

the mad matter

 

 

 

parlay the matter

into mattering 

no matter 

what the cost

of solving the matter

what is the matter with me?

what mattered to you

was taking my matters

into your own hands

and smattering disregard

as i let down my guard

and let you matter

much too relevantly

destroying what relevant love

that to my heart

still mattered.

 

 

erin-cilberto

5/19/22

Reviews

[CD Campbell]

Inventive. There's only a "smattering" of people that I know who could use the same word over and over again and have the poem still appear fresh. I applaud that. I think the base matter of the work is something that we all feel, sometimes too much, sometimes too little, but you expressed it in such away that it is universal. Another great work. CD

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I appreciate your kind words, CD,
j.

[andrew mitchell]

Love the title. When matters of the heart overrule grey matter with disastrous results.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, andrew,
j.

[John the Baptist]

The answer may lie in putting mind over matter. Give it a try, anyway. What have you got to lose?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

good thought...thank you, John,
j.

[Ranger Kessel]

I sensed trouble in the force. Nicely expresses. Thanks Jacob for posting this.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I like the Star Wars reference...
maybe Yoda wrote this poem, not me.
j.

[lightsong]

I feel your anger through your lines, frustration and deep sadness. It's ok to feel them and live them, release them into words. The world is the mad not us or our brains. Peace for You Mr. J🤍🕊️

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, lightsong,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Great word play here Jacob, though the ending is not a happy one. The reader has no idea at the start that this word play is going to descend into sadness. The last three lines really delivering the meaning to the reader.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Chris,
j.

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

As clever of a piece this was, the heartache of it all is not lost for even a second. Well done!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you so much, Travis...I appreciate you.
j.

[William Michael Reeves]

I love it!!! I came straight to this after posting what I wrote today. I had glanced at top writing and the repetition caught my eye, but no time at the moment. Our poems are very different but I feel its kind of uncanny we were doing something similar. Kind of stacking words in anaphora. This flows straight to the grey matter in my head and puts the matter of love to rest!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I don't know what matter I have in my head, Bill....
but it matters not...I just feel lucky to get to write and I appreciate your words...and yes, read yours and we certainly were going in the same direction...thanks,
j.

[Aura]

This was worded very intelligently. The way you use the word matters in different ways was cool! It shows how one person who mattered very much to the other, used it to their advantage and took the love of that person and just walked all over it. At least that's how I interpreted this powm. I liked your usage of the word matters, sounds somewhat like a tounge twister and a riddle!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I like how you interpreted this...it matters much to me that you visited and left words,
j.

[Aura]

Anytime :)

[Betty Hermelee]

I couldn't come up with this if I tried... its is cleverly funny, as only you can manage to create. I read it three times and laughed each time too.
Best, B

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I bet you would not have the fourth time...:))))
I appreciate your words, Betty..I am still smiling.
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

You’re very welcome my friend J😊