in another time

in another time

 

 

 

 

castles of egg shell logic

the impediment

of the moat of self-doubt

 

the gators poised in wait

to nourish on dreams

 

a draw bridge lowers

inciting hope

and then the flowers shut tightly,

encircling

 

you were an army of roses to placate

but my armor too resistant

 

now the gators rest

eyes on a prize

that gallops away in fear

 

the castle abandoned.

 

 

erin-cilberto

9/22/23

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

Oh, that egg shell logic. Self doubt is so destructive. Tell me about it. Those gators are fearsome. The flowers are so
much nicer when they are in full bloom and smile at you.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, much nicer,
Thank you, Chris,
j.

[redzone]

in looking at our lives, it is amazing how often our dreams are or have been eaten by self-doubt, truly a monster of a gator... why is that I wonder?? is it our dreams are just fantasy, there to drown our hopes in that moat?? or is it our own thinking that keeps those dreams at arm's length?? in some ways, when we walk or ride away; when we cast aside the roses, we are also giving up to the hardships and failures in life. Thank you, Jacob, for your poetry.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Weird that I just posted this poem and today online a news story about a gator, I think in Florida, that was shot and killed because it had a lifeless human body in its mouth.
strange ways of strange days
thank you, Curt.
j.

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

Allow those flowers to open up and Thier beauty be seen...lower that bridge and take a walk ...🌹

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your thoughts, Thoughts in Time...and so nice to see you around again,
j.

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹

[John the Baptist]

That moat of self doubt is one b***h. Once its face is gazed upon, the gators make their entrance and the flowers start closing. Don't even think about a siege; that castle is now up for lease.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, John,
j.

[Patricia]

I think this is wonderful! It has great imagery and terrific lines that I wish I had thought of. I think we all get to this point, we just get a tough hide with time.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

a very tough one, I believe.
Thank you, Patricia,
j.