the shape of illusion

the shape of illusion

i thought an echo

came from afar

dancing and singing my name

but imagined lyrics

never made it to the page

the mountains are silent

as always, as ever

i breathed the scent of pine

but our skies never align

the sound effects

an audio mirage

a fool drinks from

the disappearing brook

of hope

and that sound

carries, one more time.

erin-cilberto

10/1/23

Reviews

[carl]

enjoyed your imagery very much, hitting on all senses and creating an illusion in the process, well said and structured, thanks for the post. -carl 9( don't feel the need to respond with a review, I've been busy with other matters, should have something new before long )

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind review, carl,
j.

[Sami Khalil]

Reality is merely an illusion; an optical one, a sound illusion, a felt one. Wow!
It seems we are all living in a dream state; ephemeral one.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I was for a bit...and woke up again,
thank you, Sami,
j.

[Sami Khalil]

Hehehe! You are welcome sir Jacob

[Chris Shaw]

Keep listening. This poem J is both sad and haunting. There are times when I least expect it that I hear both my Dad and my Nan calling me. When it’s my Dad, it’s Christine. When it’s my Nan, it’s Chris. It is such a blessing. I get such a feeling of comfort when that happens.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I wonder why it is that our parents have to be so formal with our names...or maybe just when they are mad at us.
I appreciate hearing how readers put their own slant on my words.
thank you,
j.

[Light and ashes]

What a haunting write.

Hope is but an echo from days gone by..
an illusion.

I hope upon the breath of a prayer 🙏 that it is not true, alhough, I truly understand the temptation to feel this way.

Especially, from one who has lived several more years than I...

I understand.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Light...
j.

[Light and ashes]

Of course, always..
LA.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Favourite lines here

“ the sound effects
an audio mirage
a fool drinks from”

You’ve mixed up sound with sight very clever then you drank it. So fantastic!!!

Love your work did you guess ?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind words, Julie,
j.