"The Steady Climb"

What you achieved today can be done in spades tomorrow. Each day your surpassing the next version of yourself

"If your life is full of goals"

"I believe you have great control"

"When you make progress past your mind"

"soon it'll exist in mankind"

"but don't get complacent"

"because goal stagnation merits replacement"

"Instead, keep striving to achieve"

"because you'll shock those that disbelieve"

Reviews

[Glennise Ayuk]

This poem is beautiful, with a consistent and very relevant theme.
I however suggest that given it's brevity, no word should appear twice. A reader's mind is still echoing the first "your" or "you" or "because" when they read it again. It could detach them.
also, look at the poem without the "but" that begins the fifth line, and the "because" at the start of the 6th and 8th lines. It enhances brevity but the message still stays.

[Thepensiveplayer]

Thanks for the review I really appreciate it. I just write from the heart because it seems like the best start.