Explosion

Explosion

A Poem by Tallulah
"

happens every night getting louder and louder each time

"

Explosion

It happens every single night

Getting louder and more dangerous as time

Continues to fly by

 

Explosion

Not one of fire and flames

but one of harsh words, raised voices, and threats

that results in tears and heart break

 

Explosion

Makes you wish for isolation and protection

For comfort and something to hide in

But in an explosion like this

there is no safe zone

No isolation

the damage is wide spread

kind of makes you wish you were dead

 

Explosion

 

 

© 2009 Tallulah


Author's Note

Tallulah
hmmm written uickly but i kinda like it. I think i might have over done it with the repetitiopn of explosion but let me know what u guys think.
<3 Tallulah

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no...you nailed it dead on. excellent delivery. this piece is absolutely wonderful.

Posted 14 Years Ago


I like the repetition, but you're right...there was one too many. I think, perhaps, that if you tried ending it before the last "explosion", you might get what you're shooting for.

Otherwise, it's a great piece. I like the idea behind it and you execute it very well.

Posted 14 Years Ago


I like this, but I feel like it's missing something. Also, I like the repetition thing XD

Posted 14 Years Ago


I LOVE IT!!!!!!!!! I relate so well to it.
"No isolation

the damage is wide spread

kind of makes you wish you were dead"
I think was the best part!!
amazing work.
Thanks for sharing.


Posted 14 Years Ago



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Added on June 26, 2009

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Hi! My name's Tallulah! I'm a 16 year old girl. There's not much to say about me. I like to write, draw, read and run. I love music and am trying to learn to play the guitar....failing at it though. I.. more..

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