Walking with him.

My journey with my beloved. Sometimes the path is clear and sometimes i feel lost in the valleys of life. But when i quiet down, i find my beloved has always been there waiting for me to be led.

Holding on by a fine thread..

with my portion of faith.

Looking back to Egypt.

Where once I was captive.

 wondering if it was better there that where I am now.

In the desert, feeling aimless

walking wounded.

Promises given, promises believed,

promises doubted. Walking in faith.

walking blind.

walking with promises in my heart.

seeing the signs, the oh so subtle signs.

Is it my shepherd?

I cry out to him. Is it him?

Many voices all at once,

pulling me in all directions.

 and I am only falling to pieces.

with nothing of me left, just more of him.

Isn’t that the point?

That we may decrease, so that he may increase?

Yes!

May all of me crumble before your feet in recognition of your

Magnificence O' God. And so

I walk in faith as you lead the way.

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[GelatiKING]

Hi Melba,

I am genuinely interested in your faith journey (I searched for writings under "religious" when I found yours).

A few of the lines and ideas I like are: Your reference to Egypt and sharing that sense of captivity. "Walking wounded." "Is it my shepherd?" The many voices pulling you apart, and somehow that makes room for God to increase within you.

However, I have the lingering feeling that I don't really know enough about you. This poem is ALMOST intimate, but not quite. A suggestion would be to say something specific about the promises you hold in your heart. Another point of disconnect is when you transition from your low point to the resolution. On the one hand, I love the "Yes!" which is both and answer and a transition. On the other, your transition seems to be too formal, too formulaic compared to the rest of your poem. To say it another way, it sounds like your voice changes (as, in a sense, it should), but not in a way that is cohesive.

Anyway, I hope this helps, and I hope to read more of your work soon.

Ed