WHO AM I ? (PART4)

he knocked it was a yes.. what happen after ?

 

Now he is relaxed!

She has accepted his call

 

 To her mind, she gave some ideas.

“Swimming in a deep sea

Just to know how to deal!!

Am I to him that dear”

 

Doubting , I am not.

But once an empty rose was offered to me

Glad I used to be”

 

They sat and talked for hours and hours

Looking at each others

Straight questions weren’t from his side

Why will it be asked?

He enjoyed the view, the moves, the smiles

 

 

“That’s a sign….

The shadow of his warmth

Embraced my deep secrets at his shore”

The more relaxed she feels

The more her feminine acts appears

 

“Thought you are alone

Who is this?

That was the voice of an old empty rose

All three went into a silent chock.

Author's Note

An open heart for any of your remarks

Reviews

[highthought]

Magdelena i ve tried before to manage the poem
but couldn t, but it is ok now i guess

[Stef Outsiders]

I agree with magdelena, your writing style is different. But really good at the same time, I like the line the shadow of his warmth. good good!

[Magdelena]

This mystifies me.. I like your lines, they are and do, come forth as a mystery, for that is what you are. What we all are really when you come down to it. A rose can bloom beautifully when handled with the utmost care, yet let it linger untouched, it will wither and die. I had to make your words larger, :) being I could not read it in such small print, but I am glad I did. I always use this font, my favorite. Your last stanza blew me away, because to me it is saying that the one you are talking to, or once were talking to... Thinks she is alone in this world, but alas she is in fact not, there was the two of you, and the rose representing the love that was once there, which now has taken all into a pit of loneliness, for she is no longer there to hear your voice,, nor you hers, the rose? A symbol I think.. Something new, like a fresh summer breeze, that is what a rose represents to me. Open petals, like a new start in life.
I like how you come forth with your images, though different as they are from any I have read before, not meaning yours, but others before on this site or anywhere for that matter.

I Liked this... Now is it the end? Or does it go on?

'Who am I?'