Leave a message

I am so going to put this as my answering machine message...

Hi, you've reached 419-547-3509.

If this is a wrong number, that's fine.

Leave a message at the beep

unless you are my ex, you creep.

If you are hang up the f*****g phone.

You haven't yet? I should have known.

I thought I made it clear to you

we were done, finito, through.

Forget the dog, I don't want it.

No explinations, you just wouldn't commit.

Well anyways, if you're not her,

leave a message and, well, err...

 

 

*Beep*

 

Author's Note

I hope it is ok. I really have wanted to do something like this for quite some time.

Reviews

[Asha Raphael]

it is amazing . . i loved it!

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Well, this made me laugh out loud - if that wasn't the intention I am sorry - if so then thank you very much.
Light,
Siddartha

[theair]

Well, it's interesting. It reminds me of a poem I read by Fred Chappell which basically operates on the same exact concept. What I like better about his (and it's not really fair to compare, since the guy is a professional writer) is that it reaches further in scope, in breadth. I'd like to see you move past the notions of the ex and continue this voice you've built. (The voice is the strong point in the poem). Of course, I'm probably over-analyzing, because this is just a fun piece and should probably be left at that.

here's to hoping she doesn't call
theair

Funny! I loved this! I think it is more than ok! Really good!