Ode to the Electric Chair

I don't know what brought this up. It's about a guy who's done a horrible crime and is in the electric chair. I made it in like five minutes.

As I sit here

I wonder why

Everything I've done

Has made me cry

 

Bloodshed

Murder

Violence

Insanity

All my doing

 

As I sit here

in this

Cold

Dark

Room

I think to myself

"I fucked up"

 

As I sit here

They come in

Turn on the switch

 

I sizzle

I burn

I fry

No help

 

As I sit here

A burnt carcass

I wonder why

Nobody has helped me

 

I cry.

Author's Note

I'm not exactly a poet, and this is my first try.

Reviews

[Chelsea Schermerhorn]

For a first try, this is really good. I like it. Punctuation is needed, but very effective and interesting.

[Liam]

For a first try, this is pretty good. Well done, although you should possibly change the first stanza to make it sound less forced, and also add punctuation (full stops, capital letters and commas where appropriate). Well done, though, not bad at all!