Thoughts On A Haiku

for my wife, my love,

Thoughts On A Haiku

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     Percussion hawks

     beat that beat

     drum     drum     drum

     the slap of feather on wind

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     Lost peacock struts

     unfamiliar territory

     looking for the look

     the hint of dreams ?

     in the unsane rooster's 

                                  mad eye

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     Send me the bird song

     envelop it in envelopes

     of sweet sweet sound

     and post me, first class

air mail

     squashed between flat brown

                                      and bubble wrapped form

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     A tiny purple god upon my walk

     the chirp of a wren

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     mmmmm

     and inhale     one     two     three

     what haiku solace

           what haiku joy

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     The petalled Buddha smile

     invokes lilac mind

     centering  on sweet scented stems, stamen

                                                       and cloud

     

Reviews

[Eilis]

The petaled Buddha smile
blooms across afternoon after
afternoon--lifting
until the wren wing grows

strong enough to fly away.

I don't want to say a lot and spoil the lovely effect of your poem. Will just leave my inspired haiku-ish thing and say I love the tenderness and peace of your poem, Gram. You have so many different tools in your poetry toolbox. I always learn something from your poems.

[gram linski]

the wren's wings grow
strong, the flowered wind
causing purple petaled
Buddha smiles,

you have added to the effect of the poem, Eilis , you are always so in tune with my simple brain, there was a tenderness and peace, glad you picked up on that, was a lovely walk with my wife, my love, thanks as always for your continued support, despite, my shy antisocialness haha, always learn from your reviews,

[Chris Shaw]

Your final thoughts here gram are exquisitely beautiful. I note this poem was a dedication to your wife and that last part especially is a gift. There were feathers here and birds of various kinds. Birds can get ruffled feathers from time to time, but feathers always give me a sense of lightness and peace. My mind wandered with the smoke. Forgive my ramblings but that is where you took me. Hope you are doing ok.

Chris

[gram linski]

hey, Chris, thanks for the great review, was a wee walk in the countryside, was grand, I'm well thanks, hope you are too, always appreciate your kind words, take care, Chris

[Chris Shaw]

All good here and that walk must have been wonderful. The lightness and peace certainly came across. You rake care too. All the best.

Chris