. She .

this poem was written long time back for my soulmate who was yet to come into my life ..

Why am i alone ,why am i depressed
Guess its for my feelings that i have always suppressed.

Only if i could get a vent
Only if a few moments of bliss i could spent.

At times I wonder if i am to stay alone forever
If its to my fate that i should surrender.

But my inner soul speaks out
Hope's still there , all's not lost.

Its a wait .. though a long one
For someone special , someone chaste
That's undoubtedly gonna be my soulmate

I am sure of a change of fate.
Look out everyone
There SHE comes through the Heavenly gates !

Reviews

[clauds294]

Wow this was an amazing poem! I loved this one so much! You made the flow and the feelings become one and intertwined it all beautifully. You are a wonderful poet. Please continue because the talent is just seeping through the words you speak. Wonderful.

[ShaneBerry]

lol very sweet, it has that "lover boy in back of class" feel to it, i liked it allot lol!

[Justin Street]

Why am I alone.... The million dollar question. Quite an excellent poem, Stoic you always impress. If i had to say anything bad it would be the flow. At the beginning it was beautiful. Every word met the other as if it were wind, but then about halfway your write turned semi-stream of consciousness. This is of course a personal opinion though. Great write -Justin

[SamBug]

This was fantastic!!!

[R.S. Wilder]

"Its a wait .. though a long one
For someone special , someone chaste
That's undoubtedly gonna be my soulmate"

I liked this verse best - why? Because between the lines I read a long suffering patience that has had heart breaks, but still keeps looking...and may be that search has started to take its toll...I like it. A pretty good write.

[deeps]

This is so amazing, i like this.

[Laura Yida <3]

this is really cute

[Alicante lullaby]

heavenly getes...you have great expectations my friend..look out...overall a lovely,passionate write...

[KatiePie]

I could see a man perched up at a desk writing this and saying it aloud as he did so, but in random moment, pauses between the words he was saying, he saw her face, in the silence her beauty crept up on him, but he kept writing, because he knew the 'she' he saw would fade, but if he kept writing.. writing this, maybe he'd be able to capture her essence at the very least, and that essence would be enough to hold him over, until he finds the girl the essence lingers with.
That's what I imagined going on in my head, I'm sorry if it's a bit off, but I just thought I'd share that with you. Good write though, I can tell you have talent ^-^
Keepy up the good work!!