Death

wishing for my early demise ....

how long before this mortal body of mine gives in
relieving me of the echoes of this constant din.

every night as i go to sleep
my soul gives a silent cry cause it just cant weep.

the past is a constant reminder of the sins i have done
kindly hand me over a fully loaded gun

torn into pieces, i have already broken down
i don't give a s**t when you all look at me and frown.

drugs and cigarettes aren't doing any good
i would have changed if i could.
 
yeah bring it on, quick and fast
render me a deadly blow that won't let me for long last.

slowly but steadily i am drifting along
the Satan is hypnotizing me with his mellifluous song.

let this night my final moment come by
i am ready to walk up to the guillotine and die ...

Author's Note

i was high while penning this down .. so kindly don't mind minute errors (if there are any)

Reviews

[JENY]

You have the caliber to become a professor in English….
As I go through your poems….
I can see that …..you cant stop talking about the same theme….
You collect a handful of apt words…
And paint your feelings with them…..in a touching manner….
Then you collect…another set of words…..and depict the same feelings………very beautifully….
And so on….
Hey man cant you try…some other emotions….
Other that these……..
Add spice to your creative endeavors…..

[♥(heatherawesome..]

this is so awesome and i love it

[Prateeksha Khot]

no errors at all. really good

[Elizabeth]

Well done. I think the rhyme scheme worked nicely, and I didn't see any errors. The other commentator is right... never mind what anyone else thinks of your work. I enjoyed this piece. It is dark, but well written.

[I Am Svetlana]

There aren't any errors, don't worry. But I really liked this...and you should never care about when people frown at you, just don't care what they think about you because none of it matters.