Believe

Believe

A Poem by the_stoic
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something that i wrote to buckle up my fallen spirit ..

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Believe in what you feel inside
as you begin to get into your stride
giving thine dreams the wings to fly
for all that thou desire, underneath the blue sky...

© 2010 the_stoic


Author's Note

the_stoic
don't judge it by meters cause i am ignorant of the same .

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very nice sentiments...
the Old English pronouns are tough...
it should be..."giving THY dreams...
and "...for all that thou DOST desire...or "...all that thou DESIREST..."
I suppose if you use "THOU" in one instance, you should should be true to that and use it in place of the other "you"s in the poem...

whatever thou dost feel inside
as thou beginst to hit thy stride
endow thy dreams the wings to fly
for all thou desirest...neath clear blue sky...

all technical tricks to make your thoughts soar unfettered...
Not meaning to be critical...just wanting to help...like adjusting a crooked neck tie before your debut...



Posted 13 Years Ago


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This is really first rate

Posted 13 Years Ago


Beautiful thoughts, dear friend .. you feel so strongly, your words just flow



Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

nice flow and rhyme filled with intuition

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sometimes people can become too over worried about the meteres, thats just my opinion though love lol
I like this a lot, speaks from the heart, reflective and honest:)
xx

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hmmmm..... beautiful picture. it's not my fav write of yours, but still gets points for a good message.

Posted 13 Years Ago


The image is stunning and your words flow with the same beauty.. May we believe and hold tight to those dreams.. Yes... The world would try and tear them away.. Thank you for this profound challenge.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The photo is a poem all to its self, the image and urging to let go and take flight is magnificent.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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very nice sentiments...
the Old English pronouns are tough...
it should be..."giving THY dreams...
and "...for all that thou DOST desire...or "...all that thou DESIREST..."
I suppose if you use "THOU" in one instance, you should should be true to that and use it in place of the other "you"s in the poem...

whatever thou dost feel inside
as thou beginst to hit thy stride
endow thy dreams the wings to fly
for all thou desirest...neath clear blue sky...

all technical tricks to make your thoughts soar unfettered...
Not meaning to be critical...just wanting to help...like adjusting a crooked neck tie before your debut...



Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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RJM
Beautiful, inspiring for someone who's soul is down and expects only doom. Great Write

Posted 13 Years Ago


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touches the spirit..the first l line especially..

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