A tight knit poem you have here. I love the message and the way it is written. However, I would get rid of the turquoise highlight because it's distracting. I would also expand your contraction in line 1 of stanza 2 because I think it would add to your rhythm. In line 1 of stanza 4 I would try not to repeat "for" twice there because it detracts from the line. Overall, one of the better poems on this site.
Posted 12 Years Ago
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A tight knit poem you have here. I love the message and the way it is written. However, I would get rid of the turquoise highlight because it's distracting. I would also expand your contraction in line 1 of stanza 2 because I think it would add to your rhythm. In line 1 of stanza 4 I would try not to repeat "for" twice there because it detracts from the line. Overall, one of the better poems on this site.
Hamza .. that's me .. An Engineer by profession and a writer by Emotion ...
I am 26...
I am no different, I am not special .. I'm just a different face, and a few different fingerprints ..
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