There was only you.

There weren't many people who could make me feel that way,

who could make me feel invincible,

make me feel worthy of happiness,

and of love.

There was only one in fact.

There was only you.

Your words danced through me,

like a perfectly composed piece of music.

Filling me to the brim with pure bliss and serenity.

There was never a time that doubt shadowed over me.

Never a time when I thought what if,

because you were my what is.

I think back on the times when I first saw you.

So nervous, thinking you wouldn't give me the time of day.

How shocked I was when you said hello.

And gave me a smile that shot right through to my pounding heart.

It was an assuring smile.

Like it was a smile only for me.

I knew from the beginning that our love was true,

it would last.

Or at least I thought.

That terrible night.

The night was like a canvas, 

with the stormy, raging weather as the paints,

illustrating my emotions ripping through me.

tearing every which way at me,

it hurt so much.

Finding out none of it was real.

All of the times, you had felt nothing,

You treated it as an act,

all of the memories will mean nothing to you.

while I hopelessly and humiliatingly fell farther and farther for you,

feeling like I would never touch the ground because you would catch me.

I just hit.

There weren't many people who can shatter my heart,

Torch my heart with every word I hear.

Make my world collapse in on me.

In fact there was only one.

There was only you.

Author's Note

I usually don't do longer ones, but this one is. What do you think of the length? And as always, any constructive criticism is much appreciated

Reviews

this is a very amusing and productive form of poetry, i love it keep it up

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it isn't to long because its a good read..when you enjoy someone you dont want it to end..that really turned on it's head..how we see things can be blurred when seen through love goggles!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Wow that poem took quite a drastic turn, but that is how life can be... it is one of the hardest things when we learn a relationship wasn't what we thought it was.

[Team_Jaward_Gale]

i love free verse poems even if they're long

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful poem of love. I like the journey into love. Few people can make us fall and wish for more. The one's that can we need to hold on tight.
"Finding out none of it was real.
Simply a "business arrangement"
When the love because not true. Pain can leave us to be in a better place and could forget. A strong ending to a excellent poem.
Coyote

[Aarontastic]

This is a decent poem I think, but I wish that it was less literal/straightforward...that is just a personal preference though. You used imagery which was good, but most of it was kind of ordinary.

The length of this poem is longer than yours usually are, but I wouldn't say that it's especially long by other standards. That's not important though! Like most other things, it's quality over quantity as far as writing goes; there are celebrated Japanese poets who never wrote a poem over three lines! So don't judge your stuff by how long it is, just write as long as you feel like til you exhaust the subject :)

[M.Babu]

Forget the length...this was really good! :D

How the illusion of love taunts us closer to the fire to get burnt...very unfortunate! The flow was very smooth and the story telling was stellar! I like this piece...simplicity...refined simplicity with a touch of class to it.

Thanks for this piece!

~M.Babu~

[Emily B]

this is worthy work