10 Feet Deep

sometimes i just feel like i'm drowning and it doesn't even take any water

10 Feet Deep

at night

they wont stop

they run

these thoughts

my mins begins to rot

laying in bed

falling into this deep hole

they wont stop

the music caresses me to sleep

while the dreams

drag me into this hole

10 feet deep

hardly dreams at all

just nightmares

deeper and deeper I fall

the light begins to fade

unable to awake

the demons arrive

take control of my mind

i can no longer hide

behind this wall

tearing it down

brick by brick

it begins to fall

no defense

the demons relentless

attacking me

physically and mentally

nothing let to do but cry

and ask myself why

10 feet deep

i look down and see a mirror

the reflection horrifying

can't believe what i see

the demons alive

eating me from the inside out

no need to cry for help 

no one will hear me yell

the demons are me

i'm lost

buried alive

ten feet deep 

Reviews

[Adam Faison]

This a fantastic poem! There is a lot of emotion and imagery! Keep it up!

[SinnerInspired]

I like it. How long have you been writing for?

[annabellee]

Wow, such a touching piece, Hannah. your pain comes across so well in this one.
Fantastic job! Keep going :)

[Justin]

I give it 120 out of 100. I love then 10 feet deep it's a perfect title. You ever have those nightmares where your running and you look back and you've only made two steps?

[hmarieee]

Thank you, i love the title too, it just fits perfectly. I have had those but i think the nightmares where you are falling are the worst, when you wake p out of breath.

[Frieda P]

Oh wow, I felt this one, know that feeling of no sleep & nightmares...great imagery here.

'nothing let to do but cry' I think you meant 'left'...

[hmarieee]

thank you and yes, i fixed it.

[Frieda P]

Was my pleasure, I like when a poem gets me in the gut.

[A. Amos]

I love poems that make me feel something, and this did. Brilliant piece you created my friend

[hmarieee]

thank you very much

[A. Amos]

You're most welcome

[Sami Khalil]

A splendid read and write...Thank you for penning...:)..............

[hmarieee]

thank you.