Stepping Stars

When you stand on the Moon

you can see them

stretched out before you

like stepping stones,

a Giants Causeway

of luminescent gems

that you may hop across,

or if you are of a dare- devil persuasion

run, with your heart in your throat

for if you fall...

                       if you fall....

you will surely plummet

like Halley’s comet,

burning with

retina scorching intensity,

a celestial beauty

to be viewed momentarily

against the dense night sky.

Reviews

[Firestone Feinberg]

Spectacular! -- --David

[MOON]

Beautifully descriptive , the stars in the night sky. Lovely write.

[emmajoy]

' .. plummet ~ like Haley’s comet, ~ burning with ~ retina scorching intensity, ~ a celestial beauty .. '

So many interpreations, all gentle, all bright, some sad, others frivolous.. tis the kind of poem that could hang on the wall of one heart, then taken in appropriate doses according to mood. I'm smiling.

[Neville]

I watched my father shoot across the sky when he left us to go on his scouting trip to check out whether heaven is all it is cracked up to be on June 21st this year. A pleasure to read. N

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

This I like! I felt like I was there

[New Dawn]

thank you so much

[An owl on the moon]

What a rich, profound beauty... fierce and flowing from wonder to the very depths of existence. Loved the sense of flying and falling...

[New Dawn]

Thank you so much Craig, a complete step away from reality was required :)

[Sami Khalil]

you will surely plummet
like Haley's comet,
burning with
retina scorching intensity...
Nice write and concept...

[New Dawn]

thank you so much

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome.

[quinfinn]

what a charming fantasy...i love it, especially walking across the stars, don't sweat the details like, how ya gonna breathe, etc, its too wonderful a journey to get mired in the details....great write!

[New Dawn]

Ah well imagination can take us anywhere - no logic required :)

[quinfinn]

poetic license...i love it, no, i adore it!

[Distant horizons]

But what a way to go, being nothing but a flickering light to those who look. Beautifully penned.

[New Dawn]

thanks Lorry - wrote this for the national poetry day contest which had the theme 'stars' - thought what fun it would be to hop over stars like stepping stones in a stream.

[Distant horizons]

My money is on you winning :-)